Controlling the RAGE -OOC-

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#1  Edited By DaggerKlutz

After the Syndicate disbanded, RAGE was once again left without any real purpose. He was just a creature reacting to any urge he received. But after a motivational talk, RAGE discovered that he would find more meaning in his life if he began to do more heroic deeds and create miracles instead of destroy them. 
 
But many people still have doubt that RAGE has turned over a new leaf, some villains never change their ways. But RAGE is determined to show the world that he is a new man. So he decided to confront his old leader, DaggerKlutz, and bring him to justice. But DaggerKlutz is not so willing to be taken into custody.
 
The RPG takes place on DaggerKlutz privately owned island on the edge of California.

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#3  Edited By DaggerKlutz
@InnerVenom123: Nice beginning. I like how you got there. I should have my post up soon.
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#4  Edited By JokerMan24

Good luck gents :)

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#5  Edited By InnerVenom123
@DaggerKlutz: Thanks! I can't wait! This is gonna rule!
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#6  Edited By InnerVenom123
@JokerMan24: Thank you! :)
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#7  Edited By DaggerKlutz
@InnerVenom123: My post is now up.
 
Oh, as a tip. When writing dialog use either bold or italics. The H3 button is not a good one to use since it separates the dialog from the description and sometimes you should aim to have them together to enhance both.
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#8  Edited By InnerVenom123
@DaggerKlutz: I thought I was using bold?
 
"Like this."
 
 I clicked the little "B" thing before typing dialogue, to enhance the monster-like quality of Rage's voice.... unless I'm mistaken?
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#9  Edited By iLLituracy

I'll be reading. Disappoint me not, mentlegen.

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#10  Edited By InnerVenom123

LOL @ the high pitched scream! 
 
I'll post in a few!

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#11  Edited By InnerVenom123
@iLLituracy: No plans to disappoint :P
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#12  Edited By DaggerKlutz
@InnerVenom123: Strange. It looks a little bigger than just bold and since it was separated from the rest of the paragraph I assumed that you were using the H3 button. Anyway, try to keep dialog in the paragraph with everything else. Sometimes you can enhance the situation through short dialog or enhance dialog through description in the paragraph. Plus, it is easier on the eyes if dialog is in the paragraph instead of alone.
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#13  Edited By InnerVenom123
@DaggerKlutz: Alright, yeah the separating thing was my bad. I'm used to a different format, sorry. I'll do better on that. :P
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#14  Edited By DaggerKlutz
@InnerVenom123: No need to apologize. You didn't cause any harm. I was just letting you know so you can learn how to format here.
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#15  Edited By InnerVenom123
@DaggerKlutz: Thanks. By the way, I posted.
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#16  Edited By Magian

Nice read so far guys.

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#17  Edited By InnerVenom123
@ComicMan24: Thanks House-fan. :P I have no proper nickname for you. So that is what it shall be, House-fan. :3
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#18  Edited By Magian
@InnerVenom123: Captain Awesome will do just fine :P
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#19  Edited By InnerVenom123
@ComicMan24: Don't you wish? :P
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#20  Edited By Magian
@InnerVenom123: Why? I am awesomeness personified :P
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#21  Edited By InnerVenom123
@ComicMan24: Humble, too. ;p
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#22  Edited By Magian
@InnerVenom123: Why thank you :P
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#23  Edited By DaggerKlutz
@InnerVenom123: Two things. One, do you mind if I slice off the tendrils heading towards me? Since they aren't really you it is on the border of being an autohit so I'm asking for your permission if I can hit them or not. 
 
And two, I' going to give you a quick lesson in writing longer posts. Don't feel ashamed for this, most rookies have trouble creating long posts. You can use this for future posts, your last post moved the story forwards so you don't need to change it.


There are always three ways to lengthen a post. Description, Dialog, and Retelling.
 
Description is just explaining something. Like you can describe how the setting looks, describe what your character is doing or thinking, or  describing the thought process behind something. Small things here and there help enhance imagery and can really make a post longer. Do not use too much description on one single thing but use a lot of small description on many little things.
 
Dialog. This isn't just saying something but thinking of something. Dialog can be used to communicate with the other person's RPG character or reveal an intended message. Thinking on the other hand is meant to show your character's perceptive on the situation or just give a meaning that your character can do by themselves. Use dialog sparingly. Too much can ruin the post, this especially goes with thought.
 
Retelling is a short summary of what happened in your character's eyes. Like how I described you falling towards the island, since DaggerKlutz didn't know that it was you I kept what it was vague. You don't need to do this all the time or explain everything that happened but a short passage doesn't hurt anyone. 


 
Do not misunderstand me, you are doing a good job. The last post was just a little too short for my taste and I wanted to teach you how to make a longer post. I have the habit of being a tough critic so you just have to bare with me on these things. I'll have my post up soon.
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#24  Edited By InnerVenom123
@DaggerKlutz: Yeah, sure. Slice'n dice. 
 
Alright, that's no problem. Can't wait!
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#25  Edited By InnerVenom123

I edited my last post to add more detail, but the end result of it is still the same. I'm too used to my previous RP format, where rushing was encouraged haha. I'm getting the hang of CV's format though. :)

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#26  Edited By DaggerKlutz
@InnerVenom123: You're new to this, it is normal for you to have problems. I don't expect perfection, I just want you to try an honest try and I can see that effort. So relax and enjoy yourself, you are doing fine.
 
Oh, is there anything else you would like me to teach you?
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#27  Edited By InnerVenom123
@DaggerKlutz: Nah, I think I got it handled from here. I'll just get better with practice at this point. Thanks for the help.
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#28  Edited By DaggerKlutz
@InnerVenom123: Posted. Prepare for one mighty tackle.
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#29  Edited By InnerVenom123
@DaggerKlutz: I replied. Prepare for some quick morphing. ;p
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#30  Edited By DaggerKlutz
@InnerVenom123: Posted. Since this is just random attacking you can decide how many times I hit you, if I land a hit.
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#31  Edited By InnerVenom123
@DaggerKlutz: Alright, cool. :)
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#32  Edited By InnerVenom123
@DaggerKlutz: Posted!
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#33  Edited By DaggerKlutz
@InnerVenom123: Your posts are getting much better. Mines up too.
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#34  Edited By .Longshot.

Way to go! Could you actually accomplish what countless heroes have tried and failed to do? Can't wait to find out!

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#35  Edited By InnerVenom123
@DaggerKlutz: Thank you!
 
@.Longshot.:
I hope so, thanks!
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#36  Edited By InnerVenom123
@DaggerKlutz: Also, I posted!
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#37  Edited By DaggerKlutz
@InnerVenom123: Posted. Just so you know, that final comment DaggerKlutz made was inspired by my own opinion. You have been much more active recently and I enjoy that. Keep up the good work.
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#38  Edited By InnerVenom123
@DaggerKlutz: Thank you! I posted.
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#39  Edited By DaggerKlutz
@InnerVenom123: Sorry but even warm sand can't compete with your body temperature. Your body is about 98.7 degrees warm while sand, even on the hottest of summer days, isn't even close to that. While submerging the goo will make it less effective, it is even more dangerous to be underwater while it is aimed at you since it could drown you.
 
Since you seem to be in a rut on how to stop this, how about I make a suggestion. Rewrite the post but instead of going for the water, morph part of the suit so it can engulf the missile so when it explodes the goo will only be on a certain part of you where you can quickly abandon that section of the suit and no longer have to worry about this missile.
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#40  Edited By InnerVenom123
@DaggerKlutz: Drat. Okay, I fixed it. Thanks. Posted.
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#41  Edited By DaggerKlutz
@InnerVenom123: Better post. Mine's up too. As before, you can do some small character control if you come close to me. Just make sure it is just a few hits with the staff and nothing more.
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#42  Edited By InnerVenom123
@DaggerKlutz: Alright. I posted!
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#43  Edited By DaggerKlutz
@InnerVenom123: Trying a new angle, I see. I posted. It is a little anticlimactic but you should enjoy it anyway.
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#44  Edited By InnerVenom123
@DaggerKlutz: Posted! And I did enjoy it.
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#45  Edited By DaggerKlutz
@InnerVenom123: Posted. Mwuhahahha! Am I not the more irradiating villain ever?
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#46  Edited By InnerVenom123
@DaggerKlutz: Of course, of course! Bahaha! Posted.
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#47  Edited By DaggerKlutz
@InnerVenom123: Wow, you are pretty quick with your posts. It is hard for me to keep up. Posted.
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#48  Edited By InnerVenom123
@DaggerKlutz: Yeah, like I said, I used to be encouraged to be fast, haha. Posted!
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#49  Edited By thegreatfour
@InnerVenom123: Reminds me of when I was new here
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#50  Edited By InnerVenom123
@thegreatfour: :P Haha