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#2 pikahyper  Moderator  Online

@xyberdawg: its been discussed in the past, concepts are cluttered up as it is.

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@cloudguy said:

@xyberdawg:It's most likely the latter. Imprints nowadays would just be put under the main publisher as it's easier to find them and keep everything under one roof when it comes to editing. Although @pikahyper may be able to answer this better than I can.

Yep easier to find, back in the day I tried to get an imprint field added to volumes below publisher so both could be listed and searched through but it never got any traction.

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#7 pikahyper  Moderator  Online

Please delete this image...I didn't see the small piece of the speech bubble:

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I need a link to the gallery where the image is to delete it.

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@cloudguy: you are right it is all a bit off, like the saying goodbye section feels weird too, it confused me the first time I read it and I had to re-read it a couple of times before it clicked, maybe change before saying to without saying. Sought is a weird word too, maybe hunted, sought makes it seem more normal/neutral/nonchalant, you've got stronger emotions/words before and after so instead of highlighting that she wants to kill him it dips at sought.

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@cloudguy: It is worth mulling over but it might require making it longer to be clearest as I can't think of a way while keeping it a similar length. Try reading (including) the sentences around/with it while using "while" and see if it is improved or not as a whole (or paragraph).

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#10  Edited By pikahyper  Moderator  Online

@cloudguy: I always told my students it is best to read what you write out loud, easiest way to find typos and oddities.

For "Alongside Bulk, they scouted out zones controlled by Drakkon and helping those in trouble." the and helping part is irking me, I can't put my finger on it but it feels wrong, especially with it starting with Alongside, reading it over and over just feels off & slightly unclear. Maybe change the and to while, it reads better in my head at least.

Edit: I remember Finster from the olden days but the spacing threw me off and then it made more sense when you mentioned him later on.