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Disappointed he hasn't gotten a real crack at Kobra yet, but it was still well written. I would daresay that you don't tell Superman that the explosions in the distance are you splitting his focus. But he is self-assured.

I was reading the last bit with Bibbo, when I realized this fan-fic version felt like the real deal. I can't deny it - you've got skills. Very nice stuff.

Every time I read a prison scene, all I can think is, "I hope I never have to go there." Same thing this time. One minor thing annoyed me, that annoys me with all stories like this, but I suppose it's a necessary evil: Ravan is on a mission, and has had to follow a trail of clues to get as far as he has. A trail that no one else has been able to piece together? Save for other, less skilled members of Kobra? The Calculator knew enough to tell him that Kobra was the fasting growing prison religion, which means he had to get that info from somewhere, similar to Oracle. No one...not one law enforcement agent or agency, has clued into the green triangles in prison yards, and made the connection out in public, in order to expose Kobra cells? That just seems so unlikely, but okay, okay, fine, it's necessary for this type of story to work.

If it turns out that Shiva was sent to the Kobra cell by Blackadder, hoping to kill Ravan in the process, I'll overlook it entirely. ;)

I've been noticing a trend in your work: you like timelines. You do them so well though. You're very good at jumping around from one awesome encounter to another.

@sweatboy: It's not related to any of them. This is a separate contest. If you would, read the entries in the OP, and vote on the one you like best. Thanks.

Aw, man, he destroyed the car? That's just mean.

This chapter definitely felt more coherent than the first. Bookface - nice lol...although, why wouldn't Eric block kids who posted crap on his page? Yeah, I nitpick, but meh, good chapter.

The start seems a little jumbled, but the end makes me want to read the next chapter.

I'm glad to see this resurface. I had a blast, all 4 seasons. I don't think Season 4 was as bad as everyone makes it out to be. It's just that the major plots and subplots of the first 3 seasons were done, and it was basically starting over. That made it feel a little weird, but it wasn't a bad story.

Not bad. Is part 2 floating around here somewhere?