Hey Panther instead of writing "I did this" or "I did that", try writing in the third person. Like by saying, PantherFan did this or "He did that". When using I you are writing in the first person and when doing something like RPGing it might get a little confusing. You should really only write in the first person if your character is speaking or thinking and it should be in quotes. Also by writing in Third person you will be able to write in more detail and make your post more dynamic.
Honestly man about a year and a half ago I would have said you were great. By all means it's ok it's just that things are more story driven with tons of character development nowadays. what I got from your character was he was a little silly and heroic. If that is what you are going for then awesome but if you want to show off his skills i suggest that you go more into detail when writing your attacks, dodge and when you take a hit.
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