Virtutem Dei II

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Rated MA, all characters owned by Marvel, though the story is mine it is based on the actual Seige of Rhodes that occurred in 1480AD. The bottom picture was drawn by the very clever Dennis Medri who did a series of medieval Avengers. Read, comment, enjoy!

Continued from http://www.comicvine.com/forums/fan-fic/8/virtutem-dei/710871/#9

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Papal Chambers, Rome

Pope Kurt Joseph I appeared in his room in a cloud of sulphur and brimstone. He coughed as he steadied himself. Teleporting was not the easy jaunt it once was. He sat and wiped his mouth, flecks of blood appeared on his sleeve. Kurt shook his head and sighed.

“Is everything alright Your Holiness?”

Kurt looked up to see a man sitting on the window ledge, the sun backlighting him to make him an even more angelic looking figure. The Pope crossed himself.

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“Yes Warren, everything is alright”

The handsome man unfurled his wings and floated down “I wish you wouldn’t do that”

“You are an angel” smiled Kurt

“No, I am a mutantis who LOOKS like an angel.” replied Warren “Just as you are a mutantis…”

“Who looks like a devil!”

Warren looked at the furry blue man with three-fingered hands, pointed ears, a blue tail with a point “No Your Holiness, the devil is red” Kurt smiled and the pair burst into laughter.

City of Rhodes

“You’re mad!” stated Captain LeBeau as he stoked the fire.

Sir Percy smiled as he twirled his ebony blade on its point into the dirt “No, I’m daring!”

“It is possibly suicide”

“We all die,” said Sir Percy “Just ask Piotr”

Captain LeBeau chuckled “One day that armoured lummox will fall off the castle wall, hopefully crushing the armies of the Sultan…with…him” He paused and listened to the night. A faint but distinct whistling sound could be heard.

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“Sound the alarm!” roared LeBeau as he drew his sword “WE ARE UNDER ATTACK!”

Beach of Rhodes

“FIRE!”

The lines bombardiers let loose with their cannons, pelting city’s gates with shot. The troops inside Rhodes sprang to life from the Turkish attack. En Sabah Nur smiled as they fell for his ruse.

“Maximillian! DuQuesne! Marko!”

A bald man dressed in green robes stepped up, his eyes crackling with energy; as did a knight in purple brandishing a sword. Eerily the sand began shifting and pulled itself into a man-sized shape. En Sabah Nur looked the trio over and smiled a cruel smile

“Gather your men!” growled Nur as he drew his wicked looking sword “We take the tower!”

Port of Naples

The hooded man stepped off the boat, nodding to the captain and tossing him a pouch of coin. He untied a pair of horses and mounted one of them.

“You will not reach your master Bartolomeo” came a hollow, spectral voice

The hooded man rolled off the horse, throwing back his hood, his bow knocked, drawn and ready in a heartbeat “Keep talking, so I can send you to hell!”

A dark skinned man stepped from the shadows, his left hand held a scimitar; his right an Egyptian sceptre “I have already killed the knight of the moon!”

Bartolomeo scowled “What?”

“For all his posturing, he died just like any other man!”

“Bushman, I am on a holy quest, charged by divine right to deliver this message to his holiness Pope Kurt Joseph the First in Rome,” stated Bartolomeo as he loosed a trio of arrows “By all that is holy, you will not stop me!”

“Little hawk” sneered Bushman as he ducked the barrage “Maybe I will not stop you, but WE will stop you!” Two more figures stepped from the darkness to flank Bushman on the dock; a large ebony man dressed in the skin of a white ape and another man carrying a spear dressed in the skin of a lion. Bartolomeo looked down at his quiver, seven arrows remained.

Bartolomeo kissed the rosary wrapped around his wrist as he shot off a quick prayer “Our Father, who art in heaven…”

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#2  Edited By RazzaTazz

@batkevin74: Cool concept, the jumping around locations is a bit abrupt, but nice idea behind it.

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#3  Edited By batkevin74

@RazzaTazz: Thanks for reading

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#4  Edited By andrewtheking

a@batkevin74: amzing

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#5  Edited By xxxddd

@batkevin74: I like it better when the location of the scene taken place is stated rather than giving lots of details. The latter makes it feel like a script, not a story.

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#6  Edited By Time_Phantom

Still loving this setting! Can't wait for more.

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#7  Edited By batkevin74

@andrewtheking: Thanks

@xxxddd: I don't think I get what you mean?

@Time_Phantom: Thanks man, it's an interesting world so far

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#8  Edited By xxxddd

@batkevin74:

This is what you do:

Rome

This is what I do:

In a large city, with old building, lots of people, in Italy,etc.,etc.

Get it now?

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#9  Edited By batkevin74

@xxxddd: A-ha! Yeah sometimes just syaing it where it is works, I know where Rome is, you know where Rome is, the story is set in the past so already you're probably thinking legionairres, Colisseum. :) Thanks

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#11  Edited By tomdickharry1984

coolz, But wtf does the titel mean?

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@tomdickharry1984: It's Latin for roughly (google translate rough) to God's will

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Casually bumped!

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@batkevin74: It flows neatly, I like the concept, but my only complaint is switching scenarios. Surely there's a better transition you can use?

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#15  Edited By joshmightbe

Nightcrawler makes an awesome pope

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#16  Edited By batkevin74

@primepower53: Yeah I don't know honestly, its the only way I could get from one place to another without doing "Meanwhile back in Rome etc"

@joshmightbe: Yes, yes he does though my favourite in this so far is Piotr Rasputin

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#17  Edited By InnerVenom123

The best part was the bit with Kurt and Warren.

It's great how the setting makes their appearance relevant beyond civilians being either scared or amazed at them.

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#18  Edited By batkevin74

@InnerVenom123: Thanks

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Bumping some history

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@batkevin74: You really like Bushman don't you? On to Part Three

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@batkevin74: “Bushman, I am on a holy quest, charged by divine right to deliver this message to his holiness Pope Kurt Joseph the First in Rome,” stated Bartolomeo as he loosed a trio of arrows “By all that is holy, you will not stop me!”

I have read this before, very good

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@batkevin74: Yeah yeah and when we see Bushman in NYPD's Finest what will be your excuse then?

OMG Batkevin likes me. :-)
OMG Batkevin likes me. :-)

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@batkevin74:

We bonded during that time I was blonde...and incarcerated by the US Government for Jaywalking and being 'European'
We bonded during that time I was blonde...and incarcerated by the US Government for Jaywalking and being 'European'

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#26  Edited By batkevin74

@impurestcheese: ??? Also this was 2 months ago so I dont expect you to remember but I don't get the reference?

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@impurestcheese: It was something to do with my (over) use of Ai Apaec in the CCC stuff.

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This is a super-cool concept and very nicely executed so far. I'm sorry that 2 installments is all I have time for today. Looking forward to reading more! Thanks

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@wim_garnet: Glad you are liking it so far and thanks for reading

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#31  Edited By cbishop

@batkevin74: Still enjoying it. Are you still working on finishing this? Will add it to my long box in a bit.