Splicers: The Orwell's Chapter 2

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The Animal Farm, Avarua, capital of the Cook Islands 2028

“Dad! DAD!” screamed Arthur as he tore through the mansion he called home. He burst into his father’s games grotto to find his father, Thomas Orwell, playing the prototype of the latest Call of War God on his 3D cinema screen.

“DAD!”

“Oh man!” grumbled Thomas pulling off the headset “Didn’t save”

“It’s Blair!”

Thomas dropped everything and raced with his son outside to see his terrified little girl, standing on the surface of the swimming pool.

“Wow” said Thomas “Are you okay honey?”

“What’s happening to me dad?” cried Blair

“Well you know how I always said you were special” Thomas held out his hand for his daughter and pulled his mobile phone out of his pocket “I wasn’t lying”

Nexus Parental Planning Office, Hawaii. 2028

“There is nothing wrong with your daughter” said Dr Schultz “Well that may not be entirely true but on a health level, she’s fine just undergoing puberty”

“She walked across a swimming pool!” said Thomas pacing back and forth in the office.

“Ahh” Dr Schultz pushed his glasses up “Well”

“Well what?”

“It seems a side effect of the genetic procedures we performed upon your children and hundreds of others has granted them abilities beyond than of us” Dr Schultz smiled and continued “Mere mortals. You should be happy Mr Orwell”

“How?” asked Thomas slumped into a chair “How is it…possible?”

“Divine intervention, next level of evolution, I don’t know Mr Orwell. It will be for other, younger scientists to work out” Dr Schultz took a seat at his desk and took a sit of his coffee “But it seems to be linked to puberty; in my professional opinion”

“I’d like you to work for me” said Thomas

“I’m not for sale Mr Orwell”

“Doctor, everyone’s for sale” smiled Thomas “Look you made my three kids. You know them, well genetically speaking. Please”

“You don’t hear no very often do you Mr Orwell”

“Doctor Schultz, until I got money, all I ever heard was no” Thomas stood up and dropped a blank cheque onto the doctors desk “Fill it out and pack your bags for the tropics when you change your mind. Thank you doctor”

Dr Schultz watched one of the richest men in the world leave his office as he picked up the cheque. The old doctor smiled as he folded the cheque into his top pocket.

The Animal Farm, Avarua, capital of the Cook Islands 2030

“Alright!” yelled Arthur as he took to the air like a bullet. Thomas watched in amazement as his eldest boy soared into the air. His daughter Blair watched on.

“I told you it was linked to puberty” stated Dr Schutlz as he looked on, looking a tad more casual and relaxed

“So what can I expect from Eric?” asked Thomas

“There seems to be no pattern to these powers Mr Orwell. Just look at that French boy who can grow extra arms”

“Thomas, call me Thomas Benjamin”

“Mr Orwell your daughter has some speed to her and the ability to negate gravity and inertia” he looked over at the stunningly beautiful young lady hovering inches above the ground watching her brother do loop-de-loops in the air “Arthur has the ability, as we can see, to fly but further testing and we’ll see what other powers he may have. As for Eric” He looked over to the dark haired little boy pushing a toy truck through a sandpit “Let him be a child”

“Look at me dad!” screamed Arthur excietedly as he shot across the sky.

Château de Rosey in Rolle elite private school, Switzerland, 2034

Eric Orwell stood in the hallway, three larger boys blocking his way.

“Excuse me please” he said quietely in French

“Or what?” said Dragan Kopin III, the only child on oil magnate Dragan Kopin II

“Yeah or what?” echoed Daniel Duncan, the fourth child of Texan billionaire Davis Duncan. Shaka Bieber, the adopted Ethiopian child of the Canadian singer and his husband, merely chuckled like the borderline moron he was.

“Excuse me please” Eric changed to German

“You’ve got splicer brothers and sisters” Dragan snarled “Why can’t you be normal?”

“Yeah normal?” said Daniel circling around Eric like a shark.

“Excuse me please” Eric asked in Spanish

“Are you simple? A moron” Dragan shoved Eric into Daniel who shoved him back into Dragan “Going to explode in fire or something?”

“No…but I might” the trio turned to see Arthur Orwell standing in the corridor.

“You can’t touch me!” stated Dragan “You freak!”

Arthur shot down the corridor at high speed and slapped Dragan across the face and was back in his original position before the sound reached the ears of the others. Dragan held his cheek.

“Something wrong?” smiled Arthur

Dragan glared at him before walking off, his cronies in tow. Eric pulled his earplugs out and clicked off his music player. “What are you doing here?”

“Looking out for you little bro”

“Didn’t need to” Eric smiled “They’re just stupid rich kids who I barely notice”

“You’re a stupid rich kid”

“I’m a normal stupid rich kid with super siblings. I’ve got the Flash watching my back or are you Northstar?” joked Eric as his brother gave him a playful shove “Maybe Speedy Gonzales”

“Are you okay? Those kids”

“Meh! I’m here coz dad thinks it’s a good school” Eric hoisted his backpack “Why are you here?”

“Dad asked me to pop in and see if you need anything before you come home in two weeks?” Arthur pulled out a cigarette and put it in his mouth. Eric slapped it out of his mouth.

“Smoking?” said Eric “Seriuosly dude you just shouldn’t. Anyways I’m good”

“Sure?”

“I’ve seen the news about the weird Trans Human Task Force bill the US is putting through because you’re a menace” laughed Eric “If it goes through you might have to put on a costume and be a vigilante”

“Or join the army”

“Serious? You? In the army?”

“Thinking about?”

“Well we all can’t be super model actress and movie stars like Blair. By the way have you seen the web animations of you and her?”

“What?”

“Go to www.isuperhumanbangbang.net and you’ll see some pretty sick stuff. There’s also one of the Henri the arm guy doing Blair and Vanessa”

“That’s your sister!”

“Yeah and don’t all the jerks here know it. I don’t watch it but they fill up my Bookface page with it. Bunch of jerks”

“I better go” Arthur gave his little brother a hug-headlock “Two weeks”

“See ya” Eric watched his brother rocket off into the sky

(This is rated MA just to be sure. created the Splicer world but everything here fell out of my head and is mine. The Orwell's are a homage to writer George Orwell and here's hoping to one day be as good as him. Read, enjoy, COMMENT...thank you)

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#2  Edited By joshmightbe

Awesome, I kind of feel bad for Eric but I get the feeling there's more to him than you're letting on

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#3  Edited By batkevin74

@joshmightbe: Well there's still 7 years until I get to 2041 where this all takes place, plenty of room for some fun bwhahahahahaha

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@batkevin74: I know you have something up your sleeve

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#5  Edited By tomdickharry1984

Bwhahahahahahahaha "Shaka Bieber, the adopted Ethiopian child of the Canadian singer and his husband, merely chuckled like the borderline moron he was" Nioce!

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#6  Edited By batkevin74

@tomdickharry1984: Someone picked it up! :) Just a subtle dig at Canada's answer to musical vomit

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#7  Edited By AweSam

Am I the only one who actually tried checking if there's a website with the same name? Good job.

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#8  Edited By batkevin74

@AweSam: Thanks! Glad you tried the totally fake but plausible website :)

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@joshmightbe: Thanks, part 3 going up shortly

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@batkevin74: cool I've been looking forward to it

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#12  Edited By batkevin74

Here's chapter 2 for you as requested and to save you searching

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@AweSam said:

Am I the only one who actually tried checking if there's a website with the same name? Good job.

I checked. XD

@batkevin74: This was another nice installment! The comment about Beiber's husband definitely got a chuckle, and this whole affair seems to be going in a very interesting direction (though I'm getting the impression that it may start to head in a... dark, direction, very soon).

A small piece of constructive criticism, and don't be offended as this is ALL too common -- you seem to show a lack of respect for punctuation. It's not extremely important -- an experienced reader can fill in the commas and periods pretty easily, but they have to stop to do so. Try reading some of your dialogue out loud, the way you intended it all to be spoken. You'll notice that you put quite a few pauses in dialogues but leave no comma, ellipsis, or dash to indicate any such plan. Just a thought. Anyway, enjoying it so far... reading on!

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#14  Edited By batkevin74

@Joygirl: Not offended at all. I do try to write like people talk and commas do tend fall by the way side. Glad you're enjoying it and I'm happy someone else looked up my faux website. Thanks for the critique

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#15  Edited By Project_Worm

Great job Kev! I had to do a few double takes because I didn't know if some of the stuff I was reading was actually there...

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#16  Edited By SyIar

Call Of War God sounds like something I would really, really enjoy.

Great read and I for one found it super disappointing that that website didn't exist.

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@SyIar: Well I thought what if Call of Duty did God of War, a mega mashup that would work bringing Kratos into the 21st Century.

And chalk up another victim of my faux webpage :)

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@batkevin74: a little long bit AWESOME nonetheless...

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#19  Edited By batkevin74

@primepower53: Thanks, up to chapter 3 when you get a chance :)

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#20  Edited By 4donkeyjohnson

I concur with @Sylar Call of War God sounds like a great game; Kratos with an RPG in an MMO setting :) And yes *sheepishly* I too did try to click the link to www.isuperhumanbangbang.net (it's not real as I found out) This line attached makes me think you're playing us with what Eric Orwell can or can't do “I’m a normal stupid rich kid with super siblings. I’ve got the Flash watching my back or are you Northstar?” joked Eric as his brother gave him a playful shove “Maybe Speedy Gonzales” I do believe you are up to something sir! :P Good, solid read, you may have a B if you'd like :)

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#23  Edited By 4donkeyjohnson

Have you read this? Yes you...:P

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@joshmightbe: Thanks

@4donkeyjohnson: Yes I have...I wrote it :)

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@4donkeyjohnson: Thanks

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This chapter definitely felt more coherent than the first. Bookface - nice lol...although, why wouldn't Eric block kids who posted crap on his page? Yeah, I nitpick, but meh, good chapter.

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Nice! I laughed at the Bieber dig -- and nice way of indicating how brilliant Erik is by having him repeat the same phrase in several different languages -- same with letting us know about Blair through (of course) online grossness, lol.

Off to the next.

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@batkevin74: Couldn't stop laughing when I saw the Shaka Bieber line, judging from the website part I'll have to assume that Blair is the problem child. Reading Chapter 3 now.

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@dngn4774: If you can't have a dig at celebutards in fan-fic then whats the point? :)

No, the faux website is like a deviant art type site where people do porn animations of trans-humans doing each other, that's what is meant to be

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Shaka Bieber, xD

Love the idea of artificial babies being a cross between social elite and outcast. Keep it up! Great dialogue too.