New Character: The Superhuman

Avatar image for jexsu
Jexsu

1314

Forum Posts

99

Wiki Points

0

Followers

Reviews: 0

User Lists: 0

#1  Edited By Jexsu
No Caption Provided
No Caption Provided

Analysis

Eben Troy, a 40-year old British-American, was born in 1976, in the city of Sutton Coldfield, England, and moved with his parents to the United States in 1986, to a quaint little town called Stowe, Vermont. There, he grew up a modest and earnest boy, sustaining good grades throughout middle and high school.

During his early teens, however, he turned into a recluse when it was apparent having friends wasn't his forte; he spent most of his time locked inside his bedroom and having an obsession with martial arts movies -- priding himself on his knowledge and eventually studying and practicing himself -- and video games. At 18, having garnered a scholarship to Princeton University, Eben instead decided to hold down a job and move out of his parents' home, wanting to feel what it meant to be an adult first rather than continue his education.

Taking out the trash one night, he was struck by a freak bolt of lightning during a severe thunderstorm, which awakened his latent uncanny power. It took nearly half a decade to master, but the power granted him an outlet for his pent-up aggression. After realizing his true potential, he had risen to become a statewide phenomenon, using his gifts for the greater good of man and staying on the right side of the law.

(Marvel Universe Only) He's considered a Mutant, or a Metahuman, maybe even an Inhuman had he been infected with the Terrigen Crystals. He gained the attention of S.H.I.E.L.D., whom later approached and offered Eben a Level 6 Specialist Agent position. After accepting the role with the stipulation of remaining undercover to protect his family, he began rigorous training and partaking on missions. To this day, he maintains a dual-identity as a secret Agent and Superhero.

Power

Thaumaturge: The Superhuman is just that, a Human that is Super. Eben possesses one of the most devastatingly dangerous and precariously omnipotent power-sets ever to have been unleashed. He has the supernal talent of transforming into an evolved, higher state of being, where his appearance partly changes (sharing similarities to a Super Saiyan from Dragon Ball Z/Super) and he acquires numerous extraordinary abilities. Successfully achieving the transformation, Eben is afforded 50 pounds of additional mass (bodily weight and muscle growth) with no visual difference, whose hair naturally bleaches to pure white, and eyes that twist and warp into bright, genuine gold; he is able to transform and return to normal at will.

Among his repertoire of talents, he is boosted by enlightenment (increased intelligence and the capacity to hold vast information), enhanced vitality (prime vigor), extended lifespan (slowed aging), unaided flight and levitation (gravitational repulsion at 30,825mph [Mach-25+]), amazing physical strength (benches 25 metric tons) and resistance to injury (elevated bone, muscle, and tissue density, and resilience to skin damage), pain tolerance (ignoring blunt force and piercing traumas) and hyperkinetic equilibrium (perfect balance and coordination).

As well as an accelerated healing factor (regeneration at a rate of 4x normal Human), advanced immunities (fatigue poisons, disease, foreign drugs and alcohol, and weather extremes), improved speed (running up to 1,233mph [Mach-1]) and reaction time (10ms), aim-dodge (instantly reacts to and evades actions and attacks), unlimited endurance (unyielding perseverance and stamina) and agility (minor contortion and elasticity), heightened senses (telescopic hearing, panoramic eyesight, edibility and insufflation within an 77.5-mile radius) and profound awareness (inherent navigation and eidetic memory).

Others include self-sustenance (hunger, thirst, and sleep suppression for 2.7 years) and amphibious respiration (underwater breathing), telepathic communication (worldwide reading, speaking, and casting hour-lasting realistic illusions) and telekinesis (lifting any object under 12.5 metric tons), telegnosis (ethereal perception and interaction, energy signature detection) and enormous energy amalgamation (absorbs and manipulates ambient cosmic electrical energy; emission through eyes and hands), and lastly, teleportation (displacement [100 feet] + after images [2 seconds]) and precognition (perceives future visions 5-hours ahead).

Avatar image for jexsu
Jexsu

1314

Forum Posts

99

Wiki Points

0

Followers

Reviews: 0

User Lists: 0

#3  Edited By Jexsu

The calculations are strange, I know. I can't remember much of how I determined the numbers, except for the strength, which was based on the theory that if the entire body (bones, muscles, tissues, momentum, etc.) pulled in the same direction at the same time, it would exert around 25 tons. Others were dependent on a factor of 25, 4, and 2, such as the speed, healing, reaction, and hunger suppression. Now, you're probably wondering about the list of abilities. Well, that's all taken from Humans in real life whom have exhibited them, whether you and/or I believe them to be true or not; other abilities, when I find them, will be added, too. Also, he is not fueled by ambient cosmic electric energy, he simply absorbs and manipulates it for a variety of effects.

Avatar image for cbishop
cbishop

15790

Forum Posts

349958

Wiki Points

0

Followers

Reviews: 54

User Lists: 1068

@jexsu: First, he's ridiculously overpowered, but since Superman is too, we'll give that a pass. I do like that the powers are based on things humans have actually displayed before. An odd contradiction I see is that he has the power of slowed aging, but his hair automatically turns white when he transforms, making him look older. Some of the numbers seem way too overblown, even for a superhuman (hunger/thirst/sleep suppression for 2.7 years being the one that jumps out the most).

I do have a question about the powers overall: is this really the power set you wanted Superhuman to have? Or did you just keep adding powers as you thought of new situations he might need to counter? If just adding to counter new situations, then that's building a Mary Sue, which will eventually make the character unlikable to your readers. If it's just the power set you wanted him to have, because humans have displayed them in certain situations, then... I don't know. He still seems overpowered, but there needs to be some definite explanation for it when you first set the character up in the story.

If it's not the power set you wanted him to have though... that's different. If you only had say two or three powers in mind for him, but got caught up in adding new powers for new situations, then you might consider going back to the original limited power set. It presents some boundaries and limitations for Superhuman, and challenges for you in the writing. I've done this to some of my own characters, and discovered that y'know what? They just can't be the best at everything. For me, it's made them way more fun.

Avatar image for jexsu
Jexsu

1314

Forum Posts

99

Wiki Points

0

Followers

Reviews: 0

User Lists: 0

@cbishop said:

@jexsu: First, he's ridiculously overpowered, but since Superman is too, we'll give that a pass. I do like that the powers are based on things humans have actually displayed before. An odd contradiction I see is that he has the power of slowed aging, but his hair automatically turns white when he transforms, making him look older. Some of the numbers seem way too overblown, even for a superhuman (hunger/thirst/sleep suppression for 2.7 years being the one that jumps out the most).

I do have a question about the powers overall: is this really the power set you wanted Superhuman to have? Or did you just keep adding powers as you thought of new situations he might need to counter? If just adding to counter new situations, then that's building a Mary Sue, which will eventually make the character unlikable to your readers. If it's just the power set you wanted him to have, because humans have displayed them in certain situations, then... I don't know. He still seems overpowered, but there needs to be some definite explanation for it when you first set the character up in the story.

If it's not the power set you wanted him to have though... that's different. If you only had say two or three powers in mind for him, but got caught up in adding new powers for new situations, then you might consider going back to the original limited power set. It presents some boundaries and limitations for Superhuman, and challenges for you in the writing. I've done this to some of my own characters, and discovered that y'know what? They just can't be the best at everything. For me, it's made them way more fun.

1. Thanks. Haha.

2. I don't see how that's a contradiction, really. When he transforms, his aging slows and he gains white hair and gold eyes. The intent wasn't to make him look older, it just happened that way.

3. That does sound long, I know. Like I said in post #3, it was based on a factor of 25 multiplying the longest someone has gone with suppressing those things.

4. Yes. I wanted him to have every single power a Human has shown in real life, whether it's truthfully or falsely reported/observed. The only powers I'm adding later on are those that I find and haven't added already.

5. I don't know, either. Just thought it'd be a cool idea.

6. He's not the best at everything. In fact, that's why he has limitations.