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#1 Posted by Final Arrow (24426 posts) - - Show Bio

The empty wind blows over my lonley soul, It has been so long since I have known what lifes empty arms felt like, The coldness of her lips , The tight grip that she holds me with.

But yet I return to her, I let her hold me and kiss me, But I know she lies, This life can never give me what I need, So I seek anoter to keep me warm and fill the void.

I just wish it would not take my lifetime to find that one that will keep the chill of the wind from my soul , For I fear it is to late for me to understand all of life!

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#2 Posted by crazy spidey (3474 posts) - - Show Bio

srry sounds a bit like a bad 90's song (dont take my opinion seriously , if at all, I'm very hard) Its also redundant, there is no rythm,much repetition, no pattern. Too short, lack of intrest for the reader. read a bit more poetry and look for some inspiration it feels very fake superficial and plastic

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#3 Posted by crazy spidey (3474 posts) - - Show Bio

did I mention a lack of imagery, metaphors and similies, and general lack of other literary tools

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#4 Posted by Darkchild (42964 posts) - - Show Bio

The Evil within all shows through each person

The darkness a person can spew forth

The midnight air only hides the evil

For within time we all become empty inside

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#5 Posted by The_Ghostshell (84303 posts) - - Show Bio

There should be a rule, you have to have some talent before your aloud to post poetry.

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#6 Posted by Final Arrow (24426 posts) - - Show Bio

crazy spidey says:

"did I mention a lack of imagery, metaphors and similies, and general lack of other literary tools"

Well thanks and all, But I was not reall trying as you can read from the title of the thread, But I am yet to here anything writting or potery wise from yourself, It seem funny to me that the first person to throw a stone is the one with the least effprt in his posts, But I thank you for your time!

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#7 Posted by crazy spidey (3474 posts) - - Show Bio

King of Kings says:

"There should be a rule, you have to have some talent before your aloud to post poetry."

i believe u hav a point

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#8 Posted by crazy spidey (3474 posts) - - Show Bio

Final Arrow says:

"crazy spidey says:
"did I mention a lack of imagery, metaphors and similies, and general lack of other literary tools"
Well thanks and all, But I was not reall trying as you can read from the title of the thread, But I am yet to here anything writting or potery wise from yourself, It seem funny to me that the first person to throw a stone is the one with the least effprt in his posts, But I thank you for your time!"

listen buddy, I dont have to prove myself to you. If ur not trying dont bother posting

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#9 Posted by Final Arrow (24426 posts) - - Show Bio

crazy spidey says:

"Final Arrow says:
"crazy spidey says:
"did I mention a lack of imagery, metaphors and similies, and general lack of other literary tools"
Well thanks and all, But I was not reall trying as you can read from the title of the thread, But I am yet to here anything writting or potery wise from yourself, It seem funny to me that the first person to throw a stone is the one with the least effprt in his posts, But I thank you for your time!"
listen buddy, I dont have to prove myself to you. If ur not trying dont bother posting"

Free forum buddy and I did not ask you to prove yourself, I was just stating a fact , I posted out of bordem, I will post what I like this is not a forum for people to tell people what to post or not.

If you feel that way here is a link

Www.marvel.com

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#10 Posted by Eternal Chaos (23190 posts) - - Show Bio

crazy spidey says:

"Final Arrow says:
"crazy spidey says:
"did I mention a lack of imagery, metaphors and similies, and general lack of other literary tools"
Well thanks and all, But I was not reall trying as you can read from the title of the thread, But I am yet to here anything writting or potery wise from yourself, It seem funny to me that the first person to throw a stone is the one with the least effprt in his posts, But I thank you for your time!"
listen buddy, I dont have to prove myself to you. If ur not trying dont bother posting"

Then don't put pressure on others. Like you did in the first post.

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#11 Posted by crazy spidey (3474 posts) - - Show Bio

Final Arrow says:

"crazy spidey says:
"Final Arrow says:
"crazy spidey says:
"did I mention a lack of imagery, metaphors and similies, and general lack of other literary tools"
Well thanks and all, But I was not reall trying as you can read from the title of the thread, But I am yet to here anything writting or potery wise from yourself, It seem funny to me that the first person to throw a stone is the one with the least effprt in his posts, But I thank you for your time!"
listen buddy, I dont have to prove myself to you. If ur not trying dont bother posting"
Free forum buddy and I did not ask you to prove yourself, I was just stating a fact , I posted out of bordem, I will post what I like this is not a forum for people to tell people what to post or not. If you feel that way here is a link Www.marvel.com"

dude I never said u shouldnt post, but I mean if u dont give a fuck wat u post, its not very proffessional. And I'm giving u my opinion, while u attack my credibility, astounding.

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#12 Posted by Final Arrow (24426 posts) - - Show Bio

crazy spidey says:

"Final Arrow says:
"crazy spidey says:
"Final Arrow says:
"crazy spidey says:
"did I mention a lack of imagery, metaphors and similies, and general lack of other literary tools"
Well thanks and all, But I was not reall trying as you can read from the title of the thread, But I am yet to here anything writting or potery wise from yourself, It seem funny to me that the first person to throw a stone is the one with the least effprt in his posts, But I thank you for your time!"
listen buddy, I dont have to prove myself to you. If ur not trying dont bother posting"
Free forum buddy and I did not ask you to prove yourself, I was just stating a fact , I posted out of bordem, I will post what I like this is not a forum for people to tell people what to post or not. If you feel that way here is a link Www.marvel.com"
dude I never said u shouldnt post, but I mean if u dont give a fuck wat u post, its not very proffessional. And I'm giving u my opinion, while u attack my credibility, astounding."

Okay dude one dont swear or at least censor it, Now as for Proffessional, Dude it is an internet froum, Please step back and think of fun!

I did not attack , I stated just like you I gave an opion, But yet in your eyes my opion is an attack Astounding!

Potery is not one of my strong points and never will be, I just did it as a bit off fun!

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#13 Posted by Eternal Chaos (23190 posts) - - Show Bio

crazy spidey says:

"Final Arrow says:
"crazy spidey says:
"Final Arrow says:
"crazy spidey says:
"did I mention a lack of imagery, metaphors and similies, and general lack of other literary tools"
Well thanks and all, But I was not reall trying as you can read from the title of the thread, But I am yet to here anything writting or potery wise from yourself, It seem funny to me that the first person to throw a stone is the one with the least effprt in his posts, But I thank you for your time!"
listen buddy, I dont have to prove myself to you. If ur not trying dont bother posting"
Free forum buddy and I did not ask you to prove yourself, I was just stating a fact , I posted out of bordem, I will post what I like this is not a forum for people to tell people what to post or not. If you feel that way here is a link Www.marvel.com"
dude I never said u shouldnt post, but I mean if u dont give a fuck wat u post, its not very proffessional. And I'm giving u my opinion, while u attack my credibility, astounding."

Watch the language and you don't need to be proffessional to be on here. It's an online forum.

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#14 Posted by crazy spidey (3474 posts) - - Show Bio

Eternal Chaos says:

"crazy spidey says:
"Final Arrow says:
"crazy spidey says:
"Final Arrow says:
"crazy spidey says:
"did I mention a lack of imagery, metaphors and similies, and general lack of other literary tools"
Well thanks and all, But I was not reall trying as you can read from the title of the thread, But I am yet to here anything writting or potery wise from yourself, It seem funny to me that the first person to throw a stone is the one with the least effprt in his posts, But I thank you for your time!"
listen buddy, I dont have to prove myself to you. If ur not trying dont bother posting"
Free forum buddy and I did not ask you to prove yourself, I was just stating a fact , I posted out of bordem, I will post what I like this is not a forum for people to tell people what to post or not. If you feel that way here is a link Www.marvel.com"
dude I never said u shouldnt post, but I mean if u dont give a fuck wat u post, its not very proffessional. And I'm giving u my opinion, while u attack my credibility, astounding."
Watch the language and you don't need to be proffessional to be on here. It's an online forum."

Lol ur irony is spectacular. And FA, I was merely voicing an opinion. You should expect as much from posting it. And second, asking me to give u some reason y i have the right to judge u is attacking my ideas. Third I get its not one of ur strong points, but I criticize anyways, live with it and just dont take as personally

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#15 Posted by Darkchild (42964 posts) - - Show Bio

King of Kings says:

"There should be a rule, you have to have some talent before your aloud to post poetry."

ill take that as it was aimed at me

ass

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#16 Posted by Final Arrow (24426 posts) - - Show Bio

Dude we get it you where voicing an opinoin and your right Who am I to ask but who are you to judge is that not an attack in it's own round about way, They way it was done was poor and could have been phrased better if it was not meant as an attack.

You seem happy to play devils advocate, But not willing to be played at your own game.

Once again, I thank you for your time in posting

Arrow.

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#17 Posted by crazy spidey (3474 posts) - - Show Bio

Final Arrow says:

"Dude we get it you where voicing an opinoin and your right Who am I to ask but who are you to judge is that not an attack in it's own round about way, They way it was done was poor and could have been phrased better if it was not meant as an attack. You seem happy to play devils advocate, But not willing to be played at your own game. Once again, I thank you for your time in posting Arrow."

well maybe u do not like the way I wrote it, but I have evidence to back up my opinion, unlike ur attack on me. And I still cant get over... "u dont have to be professional on the internet... oh and please watch ur language" can u not see the lovable irony. And yes I love playing devils advocate,thats wy I got a 96 in law last year

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#18 Posted by Final Arrow (24426 posts) - - Show Bio

LOL congrats on the 96!

As for the swearing it is more to do with the fact that there is a younger element to this forum ranging from 12 upwards, It is frowend upon sorry but that the way it is!

Actually I do have evidance on my end to back up my Attack, I just find it funny how you see yours as an opion and mine as an attack, The sword always has two edges.

And no you dont have to be professional on the internet, Why would you this is a comic book forum as I am sure you know, RPG's not really professional, Battle thread as well, The vine is here mainly for fun, Some of us have enough professionalism in our normal lifes to bring it onto the vine.


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#19 Posted by crazy spidey (3474 posts) - - Show Bio

Final Arrow says:

"LOL congrats on the 96! As for the swearing it is more to do with the fact that there is a younger element to this forum ranging from 12 upwards, It is frowend upon sorry but that the way it is! Actually I do have evidance on my end to back up my Attack, I just find it funny how you see yours as an opion and mine as an attack, The sword always has two edges. And no you dont have to be professional on the internet, Why would you this is a comic book forum as I am sure you know, RPG's not really professional, Battle thread as well, The vine is here mainly for fun, Some of us have enough professionalism in our normal lifes to bring it onto the vine.
Post Edited:2007-10-23 19:37:47"

u missinterpret wat I mean by proffessional. I dont mean run out and get a suit. I mean be civil and curteous

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#20 Posted by Final Arrow (24426 posts) - - Show Bio

crazy spidey says:

"Final Arrow says:
"LOL congrats on the 96! As for the swearing it is more to do with the fact that there is a younger element to this forum ranging from 12 upwards, It is frowend upon sorry but that the way it is! Actually I do have evidance on my end to back up my Attack, I just find it funny how you see yours as an opion and mine as an attack, The sword always has two edges. And no you dont have to be professional on the internet, Why would you this is a comic book forum as I am sure you know, RPG's not really professional, Battle thread as well, The vine is here mainly for fun, Some of us have enough professionalism in our normal lifes to bring it onto the vine.
Post Edited:2007-10-23 19:37:47"
u missinterpret wat I mean by proffessional. I dont mean run out and get a suit. I mean be civil and curteous"

I am being, I belive so are you, As far as I can tell this whole disagrement has been civil, But I dont see how being Civil and Curteous fits in with the point of me just making this thread for fun?

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#21 Posted by Chameleone (8465 posts) - - Show Bio

Darkchild says:

"King of Kings says:
"There should be a rule, you have to have some talent before your aloud to post poetry."

ill take that as it was aimed at me

ass"

DC you sound like the bartender with tourettes from the Boondock Saints.

"Fu%&! ASS"

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#22 Posted by crazy spidey (3474 posts) - - Show Bio

Final Arrow says:

"crazy spidey says:
"Final Arrow says:
"LOL congrats on the 96! As for the swearing it is more to do with the fact that there is a younger element to this forum ranging from 12 upwards, It is frowend upon sorry but that the way it is! Actually I do have evidance on my end to back up my Attack, I just find it funny how you see yours as an opion and mine as an attack, The sword always has two edges. And no you dont have to be professional on the internet, Why would you this is a comic book forum as I am sure you know, RPG's not really professional, Battle thread as well, The vine is here mainly for fun, Some of us have enough professionalism in our normal lifes to bring it onto the vine.
Post Edited:2007-10-23 19:37:47"
u missinterpret wat I mean by proffessional. I dont mean run out and get a suit. I mean be civil and curteous"
I am being, I belive so are you, As far as I can tell this whole disagrement has been civil, But I dont see how being Civil and Curteous fits in with the point of me just making this thread for fun? "

Look point is I have made a valid argument about something u put no effort into (wow logical) i get wat ur saying, but I hate that Put up or Shut up argument. I can judge without a resume to bak me up. I flipped a bit. so we have been cvil so lets just drop this out and u can tell me wtf the sun dip is

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#23 Posted by Final Arrow (24426 posts) - - Show Bio

LOL okay