Is this a teaser? If not, I'm thinking it needs more detail. I get an idea of who our main character seems to be (Daisuke Kyuzera) but none of the conflict. I really want to feel the pressure of fighting against entire universes of superpowered characters, but I get none of this here. Maybe work in some dialogue and fight scenes. It's not bad, just seems very, very rushed and a little lacking with regards to actual plot.
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