Marvel Re-Imagined Hulk #2

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Marvel Re-Imagined:Hulk

Marvel Re-Imagined Hulk #1

Hulk #3,With Great Powers Come Great SMASHES-part two

Banner woke up,his eyes opened slowly, his head was heavy, he looked down with difficulty, his feet were tied by ropes, same with the hands.He could hear some noises, but nothing that could give him a hint of what was going on.His chest was still wounded, luckily the blade didn't hit his hearth, but the pain was horrible.

Suddenly,a voice echoed in his head,"Banner,let Hulk out!"

"What?Who's there?"-the scientist answered,confused.

He started looking around,but it was useless,the room was empty."You hurt,me can help."

"Get out of my head,you f***ing telepath!!!!!!!"-he screamed

As the rage filled him up,he left an extreme pain,he was dying,slowly,while blood painted his chest red.Seeing he didn't had anything to lose,he said:

"Okay,help me out..."

"Hulk will.",Bruce felt strange as the "telepath" finished talking,his skin was changing color,some sort of green shade,getting greener and greener,than his legs and arms started growing and he started losing control of his own body.

"W-Wha- are you doing?"

His conscience faded,the last thing he felt was an amazing amount rage taking control,wanting vengeance.

The faun quickly entered the room and pulled out his sword,it was dark,the fire lanterns were all broke.

"V-v-very f-funny,Banner."-he said,frightened

"Banner not here,want leave a message?"- answered a strange,heavy voice

"W-who is t-there?"

"Me."

Suddenly,he got hit by a colossal fist,breaking his skull as it hit the wall.

"Thanks for sword,little goat"-Hulk said with a sarcastic smile on the face-"Me love it."

Next:Escape from the Olympus.

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#2  Edited By TheCannon

@deadpoolrules: Awesome!

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#3  Edited By CapFanboy

@deadpoolrules: Nice!

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#4  Edited By wildvine

I like this, Now i need to go read the first two. : P

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#5  Edited By deadpoolrules

@wildvine said:

I like this, Now i need to go read the first two. : P

They aren't as good as this one,I'm trying to improve my writing =D

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@deadpoolrules said:

They aren't as good as this one,I'm trying to improve my writing =D

We all are. You're in good company.

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#7  Edited By deadpoolrules

@wildvine: True.

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#8  Edited By CaptainLantern76

Significant improvement over your Spidey fic - grammarwise, that is. Here, all you need to do is change some commas into periods. But very nice.

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#9  Edited By deadpoolrules

@CaptainLantern76: My improvment just begun =P

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#10  Edited By Referee

Nice read, Not much on the descriptive part but you get the point out. I'm little behind in your writing so I don't know the full story, so the fawn part caught me off guard. Other than that - Thumbs up.

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#11  Edited By batkevin74

@deadpoolrules: Spacing is your main problem here. Storywise, this is fine but "Banner woke up,his eyes opened slowly,his head was heavy,he looked down with difficultity,his feet were tied by ropes,same with the hands.He could hear some noises,but nothing that could give him a hint of what was going on.His chest was still wounded,luckily the blade didn't hit his hearth,but the pain was horrible"

All those bolded bits need a space after the comma or full stop. Also the word is difficulty :)

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@batkevin74 said:

@deadpoolrules: Spacing is your main problem here. Storywise, this is fine but "Banner woke up,his eyes opened slowly,his head was heavy,he looked down with difficultity,his feet were tied by ropes,same with the hands.He could hear some noises,but nothing that could give him a hint of what was going on.His chest was still wounded,luckily the blade didn't hit his hearth,but the pain was horrible"

All those bolded bits need a space after the comma or full stop. Also the word is difficulty :)

Sorry,man,kind of hard to write in english,but thanks.This year,I may improve a lot. =D

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#13  Edited By Project_Worm

Far too short, but other than that pretty cool. Keep it up!

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#14  Edited By deadpoolrules

@Project_Worm said:

Far too short, but other than that pretty cool. Keep it up!

Next one is going to be reaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaally long.

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#15  Edited By GR2Blackout

@deadpoolrules said:

@Project_Worm said:

Far too short, but other than that pretty cool. Keep it up!

Next one is going to be reaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaally long.

Longer then Peter Jackon's King Kong?

"It wasn't the planes, it was extensive length that killed the beast."
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#16  Edited By deadpoolrules

@GR2Blackout: Dammit,not THAT long.