Marvel Mayhem - Thunderbolts #1

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# 1 - Welcome to the West Coast - Part 1

The squat converted warehouse sat on the waterfront glimmering in the afternoon sun that bathed Seattle in unseasonably warm weather. Parked outside the building were a range-rover and a massive moving truck, the back down with the boxes floating into the loading bay. Standing at the door a woman dressed in blue jeans and a red tank top stood watching the flow of items as the sonic harness she wore hummed and buzzed. As the largest box, a huge metal case floated out the side door of the office slid open and a man strode out holding a mobile phone and a tablet PC, his face crumpled in equal parts thought and disgust.

''How many boxes do we still have to unload?" the man asked.

''We?" the woman spat, ''What exactly have you been doing while I unloaded the truck.''

''Talking to potential recruits.'' the man answered, ''Trust me you won't like what I have to tell you.''

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''Well Abe we both knew that it wouldn't be easy. Especially since SHIELD is not only funding us but is also sending a representative to oversee our progress.'' the woman explained, ''I suppose you have to take the good with the bad.''

''Well it's mostly bad.'' Abe lamented, ''Harrier is in Africa working for an NGO, the Swordsman is working for the German Government and Chen couldn't' be reached at all. Everyone else said no and slammed the phone down, the only yes I got was from Donnie.''

''So it's just us and our very own moaning downer.'' the woman mused.

''Mel that's cold.'' Abe joked, ''From what it sounds like Blizzard has got an attitude adjustment ever since he got a new Freon tank. He just sent me a text saying that he landed in Seattle a few hours ago and is currently stuck in traffic.''

''He must have had something to say about that.'' Melissa joked.

''Only that he will need to check the Freon cells in his suit before moving out on any missions.'' Abe stated, "Donnie really has grown up since we last worked with him.'' As he finished the phone in his hand started to vibrate and hum the tune 'Here comes the Sun' by The Beatles. Mel rolled her eyes and looked at Abe noticing that the irony was not lost on him as well. Abe answered the phone his grin quickly turning into a grimace as the conversation continued; the obvious manner of the call was quite serious. Snapping the phone shut Abe slammed his fist into the corrugated metal walls of the warehouse. ''Bad news the Power Tools are hitting a convoy of armoured cars down on Highway 99"

Melissa shrugged as pink energy swirled around her before dissipating revealing her clad in uniform ready to go into action. For a moment Abe felt jealous about how many little time it took her to get ready. In comparison it took him a lot longer to get ready. ''I don't suppose you know what box my MACH armour is in?"

"Possibly the box at the back?" Melissa announced peevishly before snapping her fingers and causing the boxes to collapse into a heap.

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Donnie sat in the drivers’ seat of the rented Toyota and looked down the row of stalled traffic that sat in front of him. So far the local radio was refusing to ID what the problem was and had termed the incident as a potential car jacking although from where he was Donnie couldn't hear or see any evidence to support that theory. Yawning he looked up and saw a flash of pink dart across the highway, a humming contrail left in the passing figures wake.

''Songbird!" Donnie gasped as he unbuckled and climbed out of the Toyota to watch Melissa streak off half a click down the road only to be met with a clash of thunder. ''Car jacking my ass.'' Donnie mused popping the boot and pulling a pair of thick gloves on before opening up the slightly smoking Freon canister. Since there was no time, or convenient place, to change Donnie decided to make do with just his goggles and a portable Freon pack. It wasn't much, but as he headed through the rows of stalled cars, Donnie decided it would have to do. Ever since he joined the Thunderbolts he had wanted to make the change. Last time he had messed it up but was the time to make amends,now was the time to be a hero.

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Metal screeched and groaned as the burly form of Jackhammer ripped open the back of the third armoured car in the convoy with just his bare hands. Reaching inside he pulled out a whole king's ransom of cash, jewels and other valuables before throwing them away in a snarl of disgust. Nearby the sound of a few security guards desperately trying to fight back was silenced as an armour plated door threw through the air and crashed into the blacked out escort car, the vehicle crumpling under the sheer weight of the slab of steel. Looking around Jackhammer grinned at Vice, the thrower, as he leapt off the roof of a second armoured truck.

''So Hammer why are we ignoring all the cash and shit.'' Vice whined ''What the hell are we looking for?"

''Hell if I know.'' Jackhammer replied, ''Buzzsaw set this job up for us not me.'' He added looking over to where the man in question was spinning his wrist mounted saws to block the shots from the remaining security guards and police officers that had taken cover behind a makeshift barricade that separated the queue of traffic from the Power

Tools’ rampage. ''Hey Buzzsaw,'' Jackhammer bellowed, ‘‘What the hell are we doing here apart from fulfilling our daily quota for destruction?"

''We are meant to be receiving a 6th century Pre-Columbian statuette that was discovered on the wreck of that Chinese treasure ship NUMA found off the coast.'' Buzzsaw lectured, ''So can you please be a little gentler, if it's damaged in any way then it's worthless.''

''Gentle.'' Drill snorted as he cut threw one of the escort cars with his arm mounted drill, metal shavings flying everywhere. ''The bloody thing ain't even here.''

''Then I need you and Vice to find out.'' Buzzsaw hissed, ''Make yourself useful and torture the driver or something, just find out where that statuette is.'' Drill looked at Vice and grinned, per Buzzsaw's orders they had tied the driver's up in one of the armoured cars. Jumping inside Vice pulled one of them out and squeezed the hostages hand with his bionic claw until the bones in his wrist splintered causing the man to scream in pain.

''I just want you to know that screaming ain't cool.'' He sneered, ''Scream and I mess you up even more.'' He added as he reached down to grab the squirming drivers arm. Instead of flesh and blood his fist slammed down on a wave of energy that caused his hand to vibrate and tingle until he removed it. ''What the...'' he began to say before being snacked round the head with a sonic mace.

''It's Songbird.'' Jackhammer yelled, ''Hey birdie sing us a song will you.'' He snickered.

''Maybe you should do the singing.'' Melissa suggested, ''As long as it's jail house rock.'' She added swooping down with her mace and flinging it at Drill as he begun to run at her. As the goon was knocked back from the blow Melissa vaulted over his flailing body and landed feet first into Jackhammer knocking them both to the floor. Scrabbling to her feet Melissa saw Buzzsaw spin up his blades before easily cutting the bonnet of a SUV off and flinging it at her. With a flick of a hastily summoned sonic lasso Melissa caught the bonnet and flung it back at him only to see the Drill slice the piece of metal in two with his arm mounted blades.

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''Maybe we should give you a demonstration of why we are called the Power Tools.'' Jackhammer sneered as he and Buzzsaw advanced towards her. With a grimace Melissa summons a pair of sonic knuckle dusters and got ready for another charge as Vice quietly snuck up behind her, his cybernetic hand open and ready to crush her.

''Listen lady we don't want to mess you up to badly.'' Drill snickered, ''So just fly away and leave the heroics to the big boys.'' With a screech Melissa fired the knuckle dusters at the members of the Power Tools in front of her causing them to fly backwards. As she did metal clamps wrapped around her neck and ripped off her sonic harness before spinning her around and throwing her to the floor.

''This may fetch something on the black market.'' Drill sneered as Melissa got to her feet and ran towards him. ''Now how does this thing work?" He asked as he slipped it round his own neck.

''Give it back and I'll show you.'' Melissa replied as Jackhammer picked up a car and threw it at her. Seconds later Songbird was buried under a crumpled Cadillac, the only sound other then police sirens was the Power Tools's sneers and chuckles.

''Time to leave.'' Buzzsaw snorted as Vice continued to tap the stolen sonic harness.

''Err stop where you are.'' A new voice ordered. The Power Tools turned and saw a man in worn trainers, jeans and a T-shirt vault the barricade and land purposely on the other side.

''Who the hell are you meant to be?" Buzzsaw chuckled. ''Captain Underwhelming?" Donnie smiled before recognising the sonic harness wrapped around Vice's neck. With a roar he sprang into action, his hands glowing blue as hailstones flew at the Power Tools causing all of them save Jackhammer to flinch under the barrage of icy projectiles.

''It's the Blizzard.'' Jackhammer sneered, ''I'll deal with this pathetic runt.'' He added as he charged at Donnie. With a single thought Blizzard froze part of the road before adding a looped ramp to the end and quickly sidestepped out the way. Jackhammer continued to charge before slipping on the ice and sliding up the ramp and around the loop before falling flat on his face. Stunned Vice and Buzzsaw looked at each other before watching as Drill leapt towards him only to be KO'd by the Cadillac as it was flipped over by the re-emerging Songbird.

''Mel...err Songbird you're alright.'' Donnie gasped.

''Blizzard?! Why are you only half dressed?" Melissa replied, ''You know what it doesn't matter, keep Buzzsaw busy and I'll deal with Vice.'' She growled as the Power Tools charged them. With a quick duck Melissa slipped under a thrown car door grabbing it by the handle and swinging it back at the thrower. Vice sneered as he intercepted the door and crumpled it with a single hand, ''Girl you have to do better then...'' he said before being slammed in the face as Melissa leapt at him before ripping off her sonic harness.

''It's called being subtle, maybe you should try it once in a while.'' Melissa told him before summoning a sonic sphere around him. Donnie watched as Buzzsaw sliced through the concrete barrier in the middle of the highway and concentrated on cooling the blades down before being leaping backwards as the villain slashed towards him.

''Close but not close enough.” Buzzsaw announced before watching as his saws cooled down. Concentrating even harder Donnie froze the left blade in a block of ice before ripping off the villains armoured pack and throwing it down the road. All around him the Power Tools stared at the skidding sack and jumped into action.

Of the sprinting super felons and Thunderbolts, Drill was the fastest and closest managing to get two thirds of the way before being cuffed by sonic ties and weighted to the floor. Flying past Songbird gave him a saucy wink before dive-bombing towards the pack. As she got closer she heard a roar in the distance and looked over her shoulder to see Jackhammer throw the same Cadillac from earlier. Summoning a shield Melissa watched as the car fell apart as it impacted on the wall of sound. Seconds later a thrown flurry of disc blades sliced into her back causing her to collapse to the floor and scream in pain, her cries causing the asphalt to crack and shake.

''How's that for being subtle?" Buzzsaw asked as Blizzard froze the villains other saw blade before sledding into him causing the villain to collapse. ''Hey Blizzard catch.'' Vice yelled kicking the engine block of the destroyed Cadillac at him, the piece of metal smashing the Thunderbolt's Freon pack causing thick blue sludge to leak out.

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With a chuckle Jackhammer advanced on the pack before bending down to retrieve the lost bag. ''You failed Thunderbolts and now you’re lives are mine to take!" He hissed as Vice walked over to Melissa and picked her up the neck, her feet dangling as she hung limply from his grip, her splutters echoing around the room.

''Not quite.'' A voice from above ordered. Looking up the Power Tools saw MACH IV hovering above him as the sirens got closer.

''You can't touch me.'' Buzzsaw roared charging up his disc launcher before bursting into flame as electricity lit up his weapons fuel tanks causing him to drop to the floor rolling desperately to extinguish the flames.

Abe smiled before recharging the MACH IV armour’s Taser as the Power Tools got to their feet or escaped their bonds. Jackhammer looked around before smirking up at him and removing a trigger from his belt. With a single press of the button all four of the villains disappeared in a blue flash leaving the Thunderbolts alone on the bridge.

''Well that was a failure.'' A female voice purred causing the Thunderbolts to spin around to see a woman with dark hair clad in a businesses suit glaring at them.

''And who the hell are you?" Melissa spat.

''Victoria Hand.'' The woman replied, ''And you're new boss.''

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@impurestcheese: Nice, especially your ending. Also I love the Power Tools, they're the loser Wrecking Crew!

Maybe the Scourge will gun after your guys, who knows but I think my guys is NYC based for now but never say never :)

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@impurestcheese: ''Who the hell are you meant to be?" Buzzsaw chuckled. ''Captain Underwhelming?"

Love it!

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#5 BumpyBoo  Moderator

@impurestcheese:

Firstly, welcome to Cv! :)

Secondly, this was a lot of fun to read, great start. Will be hunting the next part down immediately ^_^

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#6  Edited By Rabbitearsblog

Awesome chapter!! It's definitely got me geared for the next chapter!!!

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Great stuff! I really enjoy the dialogue you give the characters and their interactions both friendly and unfriendly with each other. I am a fan of Songbird but its also cool to see the Power Tools show up here. Thank you for sharing your story.

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#9  Edited By ImpurestCheese

@sc: Thanks for the comment it's much appreciated. Bringing back Loser Super Villains are my speciality and as you may have guessed by my avatar Songbird is my favourite Marvel heroine.

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@impurestcheese: Yes thats great to know there are more Songbird fans out there! Also a fan of some more obscure villains. I plan to read the rest of the chapters in days to come, cheers!

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@sc: cool looking forward to it

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#12  Edited By 4donkeyjohnson

A casual bump, because you deserve it :)

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I finally started on this and it's awesome! Sounds like its going to be a great ride. **settles in for some fun reading**

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Lookng for a good read? Well start here @impurestcheese ongoing awesome series Thunderbolts!

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@impurestcheese

Don't know who any of these peeps are. But this was well written, and fun to read.

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@wildvine: Thanks. Recruiting from the Z List is always rewarding.

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#19 wildvine  Moderator

@wildvine: Thanks. Recruiting from the Z List is always rewarding.


Maybe you overlooked the part where I said I liked the story?

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@batkevin74: Thanks. No matter what I do this is my baby. I remember the frustration of completing this and getting ready to submit only to find that the villains I was using (The Wrecking Crew) were dead and then having to go back to the drawring board.

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@impurestcheese My journey to catching up with Thunderbolts begins, I never knew you were interested in writing Wrecking Crew, sorry about that xD

What I Liked: Every character is spot on, Songbird in particular and as far as setup chapters/issues go it's one hell of an entertaining one.

What I Disliked:

Note, the dislikes for these chapter will more than likely be longer than the likes most of the time, mostly because I feel the need to explain myself more when making a "criticism" over a praise and also for the record I reallyI hate giving these especially as nitpicky as these are xD...

More of a personal nitpick which isn't essential to change but the images in the story are a little distracting in placement when reading on my computer. They're fine on a phone or tablet as they're centred but when ever I read them on my computer they tend to drift left or right and I'm not quite sure at times what part of the story they're meant to sync up with and sometimes it might cause spoilers before I even reach the paragraph.

Action, this one I shouldn't even be allowed nitpick because I suck at writing action. I think you're great at writing action it's just at certain segments sometimes it can get a little too descriptive which slows down the pace of the fighting for me.

Suggestions:

If you want to listen to my complaint about images going left and right make the images large and centred, it will mean you'll need to cut down on the number of images perhaps saving them for key moments but your description is so good I don't think it'll affect the quality as much.

Get yourself a cookie because you did a good job and feel free to question me on anything I may not fully flesh out throughout my reading of your glorious series :P

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Cool thanks for the review. Sometimes images really hog space. This was image updated after that dry patch so maybe I went over board a wee bit.

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@impurestcheese: The story is great so far, I got a lot of catching up to do.

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@joshmightbe: Yep. Hang Fire and I'll give you the library link.

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#28  Edited By ImpurestCheese

Bump to celebrate last issue

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Celebumptory!

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Bump to celebrate last issue


I shall endeavor to catch up, starting here :)

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To bad Victoria is dead in main continuity. She was like Marvel's Amanda Waller. And, damn you know how to write action! I've said this, yes?

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@guardiandevil83: Thanks for the comment. And yes you have although it's always nice to hear. Thank you combat choreography sessions.

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@impurestcheese: I wanted to start from issue one of Thunderbolts because they were honestly the only marvel team I was into besides X-men and Midnight Sons. So I really wanna support them whilst also supporting you.

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Nice set up. Nice roster. Nice story.

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@impurestcheese: Added to my FF Long Box - Groups. :) I thought I had started on these before- so sorry! I'll be reading them in my downtime, so I may be a little slow going. Great start. Loved the "saucy wink" from Songbird. ;)

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A good start dedpite a few typos.

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@avenging_x_bolt: Thanks, this was my first ever post back when I started.

I'd like to think quality has improved over the years but who knows...

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