Knights of the metal table. (part one)

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This is my first fan fic and i've always been a fan of steam punkish stuff! Hope you enjoy!

Scene one: We see a man, no less then thirty, fit and with long hair, running through the night woods. By the sound of his breath and the thumping of his heart, it is obvious he afraid of something.

(camera zooms out of woods giving people a grand view of the green and black landscape of the woods this man now runs through... a flash of light and a loud jet like noise as a speeding object shoots by.)

(camera zooms back in on the man.) The man looks back into the sky, obviously hearing the noise, of whatever caused the flash. He continues running.... As he looks back over his shoulder he runs smack dab into something, and is forcefully knocked to the ground.

(camera pans to the object, a large man like thing, around the same size as the man with red eyes and a reflective exterior, shining in the moonlight.)

The man pulls a concealed blade, and charges the armored object. He quickly brings it down in a sweeping motion, Clang! his blade shatters on it)

Armored object: Really that is just childish, please hand over the package, I don't want to hurt you! (the armored object says with a metallic twang in its voice)

(camera zooms back and forth between both figures as the man goes for another weapon, as the armored object pulls it hand up.)

A beam shoots from the armored objects hand putting four thick arrows into the mans chest. The man drops to one knee his mouth, oozing blood. The armored object marches towards him and lifts him off his feet, as if he were nothing.

(camera shows that the armored object is actually, dark blue with a black raven and sheila on the front of its chest.)

Armored object: Who do you work for! (it says forcefully)

(camera shows man wipe bloody had over armored objects chest)

Man: S...S....Sir Anthony? (He asks)

Sir Anthony : (obviously annoyed,) Who else? Now Who Do You Work FOR!!! ( he says pulling the man closer)

Man: Bu...bur...burn in hell! (Man spits in Anthony's armored face and reveals a small bomb) For...For Hy... He starts and then the bomb goes off in a fiery explosion

(camera zooms out to show small cloud of dust rising from the forest, then zooms back in to see Sir Anthony still standing.)

Voice: Anthony...Anthony!

(Anthony puts hand to what seems to be the armors ear.)

Sir Anthony: Yes sir Jarvis?

Sir Jarvis: You presence is requested back at the fortress of the SHIELD.

(Sir Anthony obviously does not want to go.)

Sir Anthony: Tell them I'll be there in a few moments. (camera zooms back out to the forest as we now see Anthony's figure, appear in the sky and then take off in a northern direction)

TO BE CONTINUED... Hopefully

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@Comiccrazeraze: A few grammatical errors, yet I am intrigued by the premise. You have my interest with this fan fic.

I like it. Not bad for a first attempt.

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#3  Edited By Comiccrazeraze

@primepower53: Well hey thanks for that! I will try to strive for better in the future lol

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@Comiccrazeraze: A great goal indeed!

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#5  Edited By tomdickharry1984

It reads like ZMarvel D&D; :)

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#6  Edited By Comiccrazeraze

That was kinda what i was aiming for!

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#7  Edited By batkevin74

@Comiccrazeraze: It's very interesting, very sword & sorcery in the Marvel Universe from what I can tell. Just a tad unclear on the identity of the metal man; is he Sir Anthony or does he work for Sir Anthony?

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#8  Edited By Comiccrazeraze

@batkevin74: Nah he is Sir Anthony, sorry if that wasn't clear!