Forsaken: story of a fallen angel. chapter one

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''My life has lost so much purpose since that day''.
A hooded figure breaths out cold air as snow seems to melt around his body,
''How was i to know this is what would happen''.
The man stands up and takes a deep breath, the air seems to turn blacker as it comes out of his body. '
'This is all that is left for me now...........here in this god forsaken place.''
A man bumps into him, then after five steps the man falls down to the ground....his heart stopped.
''This is all i find now......death.....despair......loss''.
this hooded figure begins to walk along the road, almost seeking for something....or someone.
''They took my life...........my family.............my friends..........everything i held close to my now dead heart''.
The figure stops in the middle of a lamp post and looks up, under the hood a malicious grin begins to form
'' The light.........seems so long ago that i to walked with it in my eyes............hope........a false sense of things to come.....all lies, i had a name once, seems so long ago that i was once called Jack, but now i am only know as Forsaken''.
Forsaken takes off his hood to show his black hair, eyes as red as the blood and fire, and a scar across his face with words to small to see.
''They burned these words into me as they CAST me out of the place i once called my home.....TRAITOR they called me, they just don't see what I see''.
Forsaken throws his arms into the air and screams a scream that can be heard for miles, windows shatter, car alarms begin to go off, but still he screams.
Forsaken screams: ''is this what i must do to repent!! must i stay down here like a common mortal with the liars and murders of this planet in gods GREAT earth!!''
The word great comes out like a curse, his eyes begin to shows signs of tears, he falls to his knees but not in pray, in anger as his hands turn to fists.
Forsaken yells with all his might: I DID WHAT I DID FOR THE SAKE OF GOD AND THIS IS HOW I AM THANKED, A GIVING GOD INDEED!!
He gets up and brushes off the dirt, there a burn marks where his hands used to be, like that of hells fire it seems.
Forsaken says under his breath: well..............now i plan to take back what i have done.............show heaven what they have done..........show god himself of what true hope is.............the only way i can do this is by taking HIS place''.
The words being to burn on his face and become clear ''this soul has wronged the almighty and must be shown no mercy for his sin, let his soul forever be like death and bring pain to all those he touches''. Forsaken flips his hood up again and begins to walk down the street.
""But first thing first, i have to go see him, the only one who can help me, the only one who knows the cruelty of the almighty, i must go see the devil himself.........
end of chapter one.


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#2  Edited By Nibiru

Hmmm..................... Yes...................................

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#3  Edited By DC_Marvel_1000
Nibiru said:
"Hmmm..................... Yes................................... "
lol what ya think :)
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#4  Edited By Magicalmoment

it's ok

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#5  Edited By DC_Marvel_1000
Magicalmoment said:
"it's ok"
scale of one to ten?
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#6  Edited By King Saturn
Ah Very Nice
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#7  Edited By DC_Marvel_1000
King Saturn said:
"Ah Very Nice
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thank ya sir.
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#8  Edited By Magicalmoment
DC_Marvel_1000 said:
"Magicalmoment said:
"it's ok"
scale of one to ten?"
7-8
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#9  Edited By DC_Marvel_1000
Magicalmoment said:
"DC_Marvel_1000 said:
"Magicalmoment said:
"it's ok"
scale of one to ten?"
7-8"
ahh thank you sir.
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#10  Edited By King Saturn
Keep Up The Good Work
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#11  Edited By DC_Marvel_1000
King Saturn said:
"Keep Up The Good Work
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yea chap two should be up thursday lol that the date i set for it.