DC Mayhem Presents: Sensation Comics #5 - Double Dare

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1st National Bank of Bialya European Headquarters, 10 miles outside of Zurich, Switzerland

The two female figures in gold stealthily and gracefully descended the elevator shaft, jumping from ledge to ledge, before reaching the bottom. Without even so much as a word one of the pair removed the maintenance hatch and slipped inside, her sister following before emerging outside the vault room.

“That was easy Margot.” One of the women in gold sighed. “I want some excitement for once.” She announced as her sister sprayed the bottom of her left boot with what appeared to be a can of deodorant

“Aliki think for a moment, excitement is all good and well but wealth is its own reward.” Margot told her sister as she placed her foot on the vault door before springing off into a cartwheel. “Now let’s see if the industrial chemicals we stole can clear the way to our prize.” She added as the steaming boot print cut through the lock. Cautiously Margot pushed the door open to reveal a set of security boxes lining the walls. “I love Zurich.” Margot purred as she pulled the first security box out and dumped the contents into a matte black satin bag.

“I think Switzerland is boring myself.” Aliki answered as she pushed her braided hair back and removed a diamond the size of her fist from a security box.

“Well when you're older you can choose which city we steal from.” Margot hissed before catching a glimpse of Aliki planting a kiss on the diamond, and taking a photo with her mobile phone. “What the hell do you think you're doing?!” She snarled as Aliki pressed a button on her phone and dropped the diamond in her own bag.

“Sending the head of security a selfie on me in the vault.” Aliki replied. “It’s not like they’ll catch us and it will add to the mystique of the Double Dare sisters.” She added seconds before the alarms started blaring and a shutter began to slide over the vault door.

Margot glared at her sister “Run you idiot!!” she ordered. Not wasting any time Aliki slid under the shutter with Margot following, only for the security device to slam shut on her bag, trapping it half in and half out of the vault.

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“That’s coming out of your cut.” Margot snarled as the lift doors pinged open and six men armed with assault rifles and dressed in black emerged from the elevator and opened fire, the sisters darting left through some double doors.

“Admit it part of you is enjoying this.” Aliki panted as she ran.

“Not really.” Margot grunted as they slid inside the emergency stairwell. “Still I reckon I can get to the top before you.” She added as she started leaping from landing to landing. Rolling her eyes Aliki followed as the security personnel arrived, and started firing up at the two women, as they ascended the twenty flights to the basement parking level. As Aliki reached the top floor she saw Margot casually waiting for her a bored looking expression on her face.

“That easy?” Aliki asked. “Soon you'll be too old to outpace me.”

“The day that happens will be the worst of my life.” Margot joked as the sisters pushed open the doors only to be greeted by the click of assault weapons and at least ten fully armed soldiers. “Maybe the second worst.” Margot added as she and Aliki put their hands up.

“Who are you?” The lead guard asked. “Why were you in the vault?”

“I don't know whether to feel insulted that they have never heard of us, or elated that you didn't blow our secret.” Margot told Aliki. “I believe this is your mess so you get to clean it up.”

“Uh well we're specialists.” Aliki stammered.

“Specialists?” The guard asked.

“Yes security specialists, we're testing security response time and efficiency.”

“At eleven at night?” A second guard asked. “Is this normal?”

“I’ll have to call it in.” The first guard stated.

”NO!!” Aliki yelled causing the guard to narrow his eyes. “I mean first we have to finish the test.”

“What do you mean?” A third guard asked.

”What she means is that you guys passed.” Margot said butting in. “Kudos to you but the real people we are testing are the perimeter security. Last test they failed so if you let us go…we can finish our job, write our reports and ensure you guys get rewarded for your good service this evening.”

“Okay that sounds right.” The third guard grunted. “Good luck with the perimeter guys.” He added as the guards lowered their weapons.

“Thank you.” Both Aliki and Margot told them before sprinting off.

“Cutest security problem solvers I’ve ever seen.” The second guard grunted as the lead guards phone rang. “Who is it boss?” He asked.

“Security Control calling with a real-time update. Apparently the vault was broken into; the thieves even took a photo.” He stated showing his mean the photo of Aliki kissing the diamond. “Apparently we are meant to shoot this person on site.”

“Oh.” The third guard sighed. “Never seen her in my life.”

“My sentiment exactly.” The lead guard announced. “No need to let the head of security know we’re idiots.”

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“Those idiots.” Aliki cackled as she and Margot sprang across the executive helipad, daintily leaping ahead of the spotlights being shone down by the perimeter security. “Seriously where did the bank gets these guys Dumb Guards R Us?”

“Maybe but we still have an obstacle to clear before we are no longer in the jurisdiction of the 1st National Bank of Bialya's European headquarters.” Margot told her as the pair reached a security fence. “One that is twelve foot of electrified with a foot of razor wire on the top.”

“Easy enough.” Aliki snorted as she held her arms out ready to boost Margot over the fence. Climbing on her sister sprung onto the top of the fence before springing to the ground. “Now for you.” She stated as Aliki sprung off the nearest sentry tower and soared over the fence to safety.

“Don’t ever comprise the mission again.” Margot hissed as the pair sauntered off down the hill towards the highway. “We could have escaped without notice if you hadn't been hungry for adventure.” She lectured as a flash of light streaked over the sister’s heads.

“We escaped without even so much as a scratch.” Aliki replied as she grabbed Margot’s arm. “We…” Before she could finish Margot’s throat exploded, her body collapsing and dragging Aliki to the floor and sending her rolling down the embankment and onto the road, gravel and dirt embedded into her skin.

“Margot no!!” Aliki screamed as she staggered to her feet. “Oh my god I’m sorry.” She whimpered as bright light filled her vision. “Margot?” She asked worriedly as the car sped towards her, its driver oblivious to the bleeding woman standing in the road.

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@delphic Wouldn't this be sensation 5, or did @joygirl take tis' the season out of continuity.

@impurestcheese Will read tomorrow because I'm backed up on schoolwork. Might check out Adventure Comics 1 as well.

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@impurestcheese: girl, it's hard to keep up with you . I'll read this today. I'm having to get ready for work right now.

@dngn4774: yes it's still Sensation #5. Tis the Season is also still in continuity. I wouldn't worry about Kitrina anymore , because I will be taking care of that soon

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@delphic: Sure okay. Still I've fixed that in the title

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Good start. Let's see where it goes

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@impurestcheese: Nice work and a great character revival! Not sure how you are going to stretch this out into a full run but it is well written nonetheless. Missing a few commas around the beginning btw.

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#9  Edited By Delphic

@impurestcheese: I really enjoyed reading this, and once again you have seemed to have found character whom I had no idea existed, and this time you're even on my home turf. :P

Really fantastic job though. I was a little unsure of where this was going at first, especially with the selfie scene, and the easily deceived guards. After that...

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I didn't seen that ending coming, and I love the cliffhanger. Very promising and I'm looking forward to more. The only thing I saw that I think needed correction was a possible typo

“I don't know whether to feel assaulted that they have never heard of us, or elated that you didn't blow our secret.” Margot told Aliki. “I believe this is your mess so you get to clean it up.”

Perhaps you meant insulted instead of assaulted?

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@delphic: Thanks for spotting that. And thanks for the review

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@impurestcheese: Out of curiosity, are these characters I totally don't know or some kind of reimagining of the Body Doubles? If not, would you be a dear and link me to their CV page so I can add them to the character list? <3

Great start-up, I loved the switcharoo with the guards and you managed to give the sisters a specific voice really early on!

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@joygirl: Thanks and nope they are not the Body Doubles. Here is a link to the Double Dare team (made up of Margot and Aliki) - http://www.comicvine.com/double-dare/4060-58887/

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@joygirl: Rouges from the Nightwing comics, I had to look them up too.

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@dngn4774: They don't call me the queen of the Z List for nothing

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Well, she died fast.

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@wildvine: Which one Aliki or Margot? Also thanks for reading

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@wildvine: Ah so Margot. Taken out by a hidden gunman, not a nice way to go

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#22  Edited By ImpurestCheese

@wildvine: Hate and Wildvine are incompatible words. So no, there will be no hate today

Impurest, Wildvine and Friends - Hugs for all
Impurest, Wildvine and Friends - Hugs for all

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#23 wildvine  Moderator

The ending really threw me a loop. I was just getting invested in the characters. So good job there. Will they survive? Will a new pair take the mantle? Nobody knows....

Also, the amazingly dumb guards made me laugh.

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@wildvine: Amazingly dumb guards are easy to fool. Will find out soon what happens next. Thanks for the comment.