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#1  Edited By MarvelJackAss433

The Beginning of The End

A powerful blizzard blasts through the Alaska Mountains.Four Coated men are seen trudging through the snow going up the mountain."How much farther is the base",one of the men ask."just around the mountain",Another man says."Are you sure?',"It's been abandoned,We aren't going to be able to use a G.P.S.,I can't be sure." As they finally get around the mountain,they start see Snow Covered buildings."This is it."
25 minutes later
The men open a heavy metal door and walk through the faintly lit building."How did the Russians Keep this place a secret?" "Know Anyone That is going to trudge this far out?" "Good Point."They bust open another heavy metal door and they see a large figure in the back of the room.One of the men flip a switch,and the lights switch on.The Huge metal figure standing in the back stands."This is who we came here for."One of the men walk forward and remove the hood from his hood."This is.....Cailgula!!
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#2  Edited By captinbadass1331

awsome man  the best

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#3  Edited By MarvelJackAss433
@captinbadass1331: i would not call it the best
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#4  Edited By Decoy Elite

A little on the short side, but besides that it's okay. Honestly not sure what's going on but I'll check the next ones to see if everything gets pieced together.

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#5  Edited By MarvelJackAss433
@Decoy Elite: I'm playing out more like a movie than a book or story
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#6  Edited By Caligula

awesome looks good so far, even if its little short right now i know it will grow :D

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#7  Edited By Decoy Elite
@MarvelJackAss433 said:
" @Decoy Elite: I'm playing out more like a movie than a book or story "
It'll be interesting to see how this turns out then.
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#8  Edited By MarvelJackAss433

Chapter two:Mis-Justice Part One

Somewhere in New York:
In his fancy marble home,Tony Denarzo,one of NY's most infamous crime lords sits at his desk,looking at his stack of money."What item should i spend this money on? "He thinks to himself.One of his guards walks into the room.
Guard:"Sir i think we have a problem."
Tony:"in what sense?"
Guard:"something worse than very bad."
Tony stands up,"Show me."
15 minutes later
Tony:"what is it?"
The Guard pulls the electronic device off the wall,"An explosive,Sir."
Tony:"is it armed?!?!What is it doing in my home?!?!!?!?
Guard:"it's armed,but remote activated,and this is why it's here Sir",the guard says in a grim voice as he hands a note to tony.
Guard:"it was next to it when we found it."
Tony looks at the symbol on the note and begins to have a cold sweat.

                             JJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJ

                            JJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJ

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 Tony:"i want all guards to search the the entire building,NOW!!",the guards quickly run out of the room.Tony goes back to his desk and gets into his chair.He bends over to check if his shotgun is still under the desk.He gives a sigh of relief when he sees it's still there.He lays back in his chair and begins to scream when he sees the figure behind him,but before he can make a sound,a gloved hand slaps over his mouth.Things go black....

Part 2 coming soon............

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#9  Edited By captinbadass1331

Sounds better than the first

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#10  Edited By Decoy Elite

The giant J is hilarious.

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#11  Edited By MarvelJackAss433
@Decoy Elite: took me a good long 20 minutes to make it lol
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#12  Edited By Decoy Elite
@MarvelJackAss433: Wow, that's dedication. Well it looks really good, one of the better text pictures I've seen.
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#13  Edited By Caligula
@MarvelJackAss433: nice keep it up man. following avidly
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#14  Edited By MarvelJackAss433

Chapter two:Mis-Justice Part 2

Two hours later:
Reporter:"This Building I'm standing in front of,the home of Tony Denarzo,was almost completely destroyed by an explosion.Officials are saying that the explosion was done by a remote explosive planted in the home.After searching the home officials found that there was a massive amount of Drugs and Weapons in the home.This confirms that Tony Denarzo was in fact one of New York's Most Infamous Crime Lords.Officials say this is most likely they work of the vigilante know only as Jack.Mr.Denarzo has not been found at the scene and officials are still looking for him.If you have any information on the whereabouts of Mr.Denarzo please contact 911 immediately.",the TV switches off as Mate sits on his couch,furious with this new vigilantly."The way this guy has been destroying builldings and causing severe damage on the innocent bystanders,he' obviously has no respect for the law or human life.He's giving heroes a bad name."Mate thinks to himself.He looks at the golden fleece on his dresser,and with a determined look in his eye,puts it on and jumps out the window."I'm going to stop this guy before he hurts anyone else.""Mate begins to glow and his shape changes in air,taking the form of a large muscular man.two swords appear in each hand and he lands perfectly on the concrete,without a scratch.
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#15  Edited By Matezoide2

i sound badass :)
 
keep up the good work

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#16  Edited By MarvelJackAss433

By the way people i'm practically high on coffee right now so i need to blow off some steam,i'll be adding the third chapter very soon,s in minutes

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#17  Edited By MarvelJackAss433

Chapter 4:Gods and Guns,Part 1

Mate stands on top of a building overlooking the rubble of Denarzo's home."This is where he it happened,he should live somewhere, nearby.""Mate looks around but sees nothing peculiar.He begins to get up to look somewhere else when he here some running in an alley.He runs over and sees a woman in a trench coat being followed by a three men.She Stops at a dead end and turns to face the men.
Thug 1:"hey,why ya run baby?"
Thug 2:"yea,we just wanna little time with ya." 
Thug 3:"ya,a little time to get to know you better babe."
The woman backs against the wall.Mate Is about to jump down to help when he sees a mass on the roof opposite to his.
Mate:"Jack..."He says under his breath.
Jack jumps off the room landing behind the Thugs.The thugs turn around and pull out some guns.Jack looks at them and than gives a gesture to the woman.she smiles,Flips the coat off her coat,revealing two Magnums that were concealed under the jacket.She shoots one of the thugs in the back.as he falls to the ground,Jack whips out a chain,seemingly made of Diamond,and whips the two other thugs across the faces,knocking them both out.Mate jumps off the roof determined to stop this.
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#18  Edited By Sirealkillz

Awesome is the word I would like to define this.

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#19  Edited By Bolzar

Interesting style to say the least. Can't wait to find out which user Jack is based on.

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#20  Edited By RavenDark

Its quite "Tense and Suspense"...I like it.
Funny how each chapter can end up like a portrait.
I hope there will be more interaction with the main...errm...characters...

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#21  Edited By Achilles.

Cool story so far 
Keep it up  
 
Btw
Are the characters the one from the Comic Vine Last Stand thread?

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#22  Edited By Matezoide2
@Bolzar said:

" Interesting style to say the least. Can't wait to find out which user Jack is based on. "

Jack is MarvelJackass433
 
and Mate is ,of course, me
 
@Achilles. said:
" Cool story so far Keep it up   BtwAre the characters the one from the Comic Vine Last Stand thread? "

yeah
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#23  Edited By Pr_Beyonder
@Matezoide:
I like your character based on the story so far ^^
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#24  Edited By Bolzar
@Matezoide: You ruined the surprise. Curse you forever.
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#25  Edited By Matezoide2
@Bolzar said:
" @Matezoide: You ruined the surprise. Curse you forever. "
it wasnt a surprise,he already told this on another thread :P
 
@Pr_Beyonder said:
" @Matezoide: I like your character based on the story so far ^^ "

*high fives Beyonder*
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#26  Edited By Bolzar
@Matezoide: ...........................................I did not see that.
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#27  Edited By Pr_Beyonder
@Bolzar:
Hehheehehehehehehehehe >:D
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#28  Edited By Matezoide2
@Bolzar said:
" @Matezoide: ...........................................I did not see that. "
sorry man,but it wasnt supose to be a surprise :/
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#29  Edited By Pr_Beyonder
@Matezoide:

amg 1,000th post!
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#30  Edited By Bolzar
@Matezoide said:
" @Bolzar said:
" @Matezoide: ...........................................I did not see that. "
sorry man,but it wasnt supose to be a surprise :/ "
:'(
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#31  Edited By Matezoide2
@Pr_Beyonder said:

" @Matezoide: amg 1,000th post! "

congrats :)
 
@Bolzar said:

" @Matezoide said:

" @Bolzar said:
" @Matezoide: ...........................................I did not see that. "
sorry man,but it wasnt supose to be a surprise :/ "
:'( "

:(,dont be sad,heres a cupcake
 
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#32  Edited By Bolzar
@Matezoide: I'm wearing a mask so I can't eat it. :(
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#33  Edited By Pr_Beyonder
@Bolzar:
@Matezoide:

mind checking out my latest dream thread in the off topic section?
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#34  Edited By Matezoide2
@Bolzar said:

" @Matezoide: I'm wearing a mask so I can't eat it. :( "

just take it off
if you cant,heres a funny gif for you
 
 
@Pr_Beyonder said:
" @Bolzar: @Matezoide: mind checking out my latest dream thread in the off topic section? "

sure
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#35  Edited By MarvelJackAss433

 

Chapter 4:Gods and Guns,Part 2

 Mate lands on the concrete and points his blade in Jack's direction.
Mate:"If one of these men is dead,you'll be sharing a similar fate."
Mate looks Jack over,Black bullet proof vest,Black Jacket,Dark colored jeans,Partial black gloves and shoes,a black bandanna covering most of his face,And crazy looking eyes like smooth diamonds,dark brown hair,and very big,just as big at himself.
Jack looks at mate for a while,then gives a gesture to the men on the ground.The men get up,stretch a little,then one of them walks over to jack.
Man:"you oh us,Jack."
 Jack:"here's the cash for luring him out here.",Jack gives a suit case to the man,and then the man and the two others walk out of the alley.
Mate:"Wait,How?I saw him get shot.",The Woman throws Mate one of the magnums,he sees that it's a fake.
Jack:"Now lets talk...."
Mate:"Not in your dreams scum.I'm here to keep you from getting someone hurt."
Jack:"Someone?Like drug dealer someone?or murderer someone?because those someones are the only ones i've hurt."
Mate:"What you've done is illegal,and I'm turning you in!",Mate gets into combat stance.
Jack:"If that's the way you want it,than I'll be happy to end this quick."
Mate:"HA,I got the power of a Olympian God,I can beat you easily."
Jack:"Show me.",Mate throws his sword at Jack,It impales him to the wall.
Jack:"Ouch!,I'm gonna feel that tomorrow."
Mate:"and your gonna feel this next week!",Mate Pulls the chain attached to the blade,bringing it AND Jack to Mate.As Jack comes flying at him,Mate punches him out of the air,and into the ground.
Jack:"Only one shot to beat him.",Jack shoves both his hands into his pockets,bringing them out with Diamond K   
 knuckles.He hits Mate in the both sides of his Head simultaneously.
Mate:"AGHH!!!",Mate yells in pain.He grabs his head to try to get steady,and feels that his ears are bleeding.
Jack pulls the blade out of his gut.blood starts dripping onto the concrete.
Jack:"heh,that was a very nice try",He coughs some blood up,"But Humans were made in a gods likeness,including the body's pure weakness's.And that punch was for some time but this,",he pulls out a sawn off shotgun and points it at Mate's chest,"Is for the blade.",
Jack pulls the trigger blows a large hole in Mate's chest.
Mate:"AGGHHH!!!!!"
Jack:"I know you'll be getting up in a minute real made,but.."Jack grabs the golden fleece from Mate's shoulder,"Without this i can deal with you."Mate slowly turns back into his human form.
Jack:"Hmmmm.....Thought you'd be taller."
Mate:"So what now,you gonna kill me?"Mate says barley concious
Jack:"No,like i said before,I want to talk."He puts Mate over his shoulder and starts walking...... 
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#36  Edited By Pr_Beyonder
@MarvelJackAss433:
your character's brutal
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#37  Edited By MarvelJackAss433
@Pr_Beyonder: yea,he's a anti-hero.
think of him as a combination of batman.punisher,and Micheal Weston.
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#38  Edited By Matezoide2
@MarvelJackAss433 said:

" @Pr_Beyonder: yea,he's a anti-hero. think of him as a combination of batman.punisher,and Micheal Weston. "

Micheal Weston?
and i am so better than this >_<
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#39  Edited By MarvelJackAss433
@Matezoide:Micheal weston is spy,a very good spy.
and i ripped off the thing that gives you your powers,i decided that you needed some kind of weakness.
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#40  Edited By Matezoide2
@MarvelJackAss433 said:
" @Matezoide:Micheal weston is spy,a very good spy. and i ripped off the thing that gives you your powers,i decided that you needed some kind of weakness. "
damn you fan-fic authors and weakness >_____<
 
lol,it is alright,i was just being silly :)
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#41  Edited By MarvelJackAss433
@Matezoide: so how you like it?
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#42  Edited By Matezoide2
@MarvelJackAss433 said:
" @Matezoide: so how you like it? "
it is preety good so far :)
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#43  Edited By MarvelJackAss433

Chapter 4:Evil is Coming

 Some island in the pacific:
E Trocity:"Welcome friends,to my humble abode!"Three other men and a woman follow the masked,knowingly insane,but very rich villain into his mansion.
Grim Tracker X:"nice place you got hear,how do you afford it?"
E Trocity:"Murder is a good buissness my friend."he says as he leads the others to a meeting table.
Frost Bite:"a little to warm for my taste,but it's alright for now."
Cherry:"So what are we going to do with that hunk of scrap metal you found in Alaska?"
Achilles:"That is no simple piece of metal,silly siren.The demon Caligula inhabits it,but is trapped in sleep."
Frost Bite:"and how are we going to make it wake up?Poor cold water on it?"
E Trocity:"I vote we let Achilles handle this,Agreed?"
Grim Tracker X:"agreed."
Achilles:"i shall consult my mentor on how to properly awake him."
E Trocity:"Great,but in the meantime i need Tracker to do something for me."
Grim Tracker X:"yea?"
E Trocity:"one of my valued customers,Tony Denarzo,recently has gone missing,i need YOU to go find him."
Grim Tracker X:"sounds like a good time."Tracker says as some men escort him to a helicopter.
E trocity:"Oh,and frosty i need you to go with him,there is another nuisance in new york that requires a man of your standards,you'll be informed on the copter,toodles!",Frost Bite walks to the comptor without a word.
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#44  Edited By Pr_Beyonder

meating table :o?
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#45  Edited By MarvelJackAss433
@Pr_Beyonder: corrected
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#46  Edited By MarvelJackAss433

more people?i need comments!!!

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#47  Edited By Achilles.

Dude sweet......

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#48  Edited By Pr_Beyonder
@Achilles. said:
"Dude sweet...... "
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#49  Edited By MarvelJackAss433

Chapter 5:One's own Secret,Part 1

 New York
Mate:"So this is Denarzo?",Mate asks as he looks at the unconscious man strapped to a wooden chair.
Jack:"Yes,and he's got some info I need."
Mate:"what kind of info?"
Jack:"A wealthy super villain known as E Trocity has been up to something big,very big.Mr.Denarzo here is one of his best dealers,he knows things."
Mate:"And what exactly is this big plan?"
Jack:"i don't know,that's where pretty boy here comes in.",Jack says as he walks over next to Denarzo.
Jack:"Come on fancy pants,wake up.",Jack slaps Denarzo a couple of times until he starts moving.
Denarzo:"Ughh,where am I.....",Denarzo asks as he squints in the bright light.
Jack:"Your in hell,and I'm the Devil.",Jack says as he pulls out a large knife.
Denarzo:"Oh,my god.....oh my god!!!Get me out of here!!!",Denarzo squirms in his chair,trying to break the ropes around his wrists.
Jack:"Look!Look!!,all this does not have to happen if you just tell me a couple of things about E Trocity."
Denarzo:"I'll tell you anything you wanna know about that sicko,just don't hurt me...."
Jack:"What was he doing in Alaska three weeks ago?"
Denarzo:"He was looking for something."
Jack:"Did he find it?"
Denarzo:"I think so,when he got back he had this giant metal storage box,bigger than a two story building."
Jack:"Who has he been working with recently?besides dealers."
Denarzo:"He had this guy with a mask,he sounded like some kind of big game hunter,A smoking hot babe,Some guy with long black hair who sounds like a satanist,and some big time super baddie called frost bite."
Jack:"thank you for your compliance,you can leave now."Jack leads Denarzo outside to his car,that somehow managed to survive the explosion.
Mate:"So now what?We march up to Troc's door step,bust the door down,and then go rambo on everyone?",Mate asks Jack as Denarzo drives away.
Jack:"No,not yet atleast.First we need to get some help."
Mate:"What kind of help?"
Jack:"Superhuman help."
Part 2 and 3 coming soon..........
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#50  Edited By Pr_Beyonder
@MarvelJackAss433:
nice :) 
shall we be expecting part 2 and 3 today?