Captain America: Secret Origin:

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Germany: Then:

A squad of men sat together in a plane, waiting to go into battle. A man names Steve Rodgers, (bred to be a super soldier) notices a man who looks like he's about to break into tears.
"First battle," He asks?
The man nods his head.
"Don't worry," Steve says reassuringly "You're in good hands...you'll be fine, right, Fury?" says Steve, turning his head to a man with an eye patch.
"Of course! You're with the Howling Commandos, son! You can't get any safer than this!"
"What about you," The man asks.
"Me?" Says Steve. "They call me Captain America, bred to be a super soldier."
"Why couldn't they make us all like that?"
"The scientist who made the serum died. Only he knew the formula...guess I'm just one of a kind."

Germany: Now:

Explosions rage everywhere. Bombs and land mines blow people in two. Some people are struggling to keep their organs inside their bodies.

Captain America marches throw with his men. The sound of the gunfire deafens everything, causing Captain America to shout at the new recruit.
"Put up that weapon and fire, soldier! This is war!"
Reluctantly, the man holds up his weapon and fires, hitting a few Nazis.
"That's it, soldier, just keep doing that!"

Captain America notices a sniper rifle, and throws his circular shield at him with a heave! It hit then gun as the man pulls the trigger, causing him to shoot one of his own soldiers.
On it's way back, the shield knocked him over the edge of the building.

Cap shoots two men with a handgun. He then notices the new recruit going ahead. His eyes widen with fear as he notices a tripwire.

"NO!" Shouts Cap! It's too late, the man has shrapnel all over his body. Cap goes to help him.

The man screams in pain.
"IT HURTS IT HURT! **** MOTHER OF GOD IT HURTS!!! KILL ME!"
"It's okay!" Cap says. "I promise you'll be fine! MEDIC! MEDIIIC!"
Two Nazis approach them, and Cap quickly pulls out his handgun and shoots the two.
"I WON'T BE FINE! PUT ME OUT OF MY MISERY KILL ME! KILL ME!"
"MEEEDIIIIIC!"
Finally, a medic comes to the scene.
"He's gonna stitch you up. You'll be fine."
"GO ON WITHOUT ME!"
"He's delirious." The medic says.
"It's okay, everything will be fine! They can't kill a medic."
"Godspeed, Captain." The man whispers. He then breathes his final breath.

Captain America finally catches up to Nick Fury and his Howling Commandoes. They reach the building the are headed for and there are two ways to go.
"Fury, go that way!" He say, pointing to the right.
"I'll go left. Alone."

After a while a snooping around, Cap hears a click of a gun being loaded behind him.
"Don't. Move." A voice says behind him.
Cap sends his shoulder back, then man's outstretched arm moved so that his upper body is parallel to the wall, Cap seizes his head and slams it into the wall. While he is on the ground, he shoots him.

Cap then notices a man going for the signal alert and instinctively shoots him. His death twitch allows him to hit the alert.
"Stupid stupid stupid stupid..." Cap says.
He notices a few men across from him, there's a gaping hole between the two sides, Cap takes out the railing with his shield and picks them off one by one.

The Inner Fortress:

A man finishes putting something on his face.
"How do I look? He asks his guard, with a distinct German accent.
"Good enough for the Fuhrer himself."
The man pulls a gun from the his desk drawer and shoots the man.
"Do not DARE to speak for the Fuhrer!"

Just then, two bodies come flying through The door. Captain America stands in the doorway.

"So...another American," asks the man?
"Not just an American, and I'm not just a soldier...I'm a super solider"
"It matters not..."

The man lunges at Cap and knocks him to the .
"...Either way, you will be dead!"
Cap hits the man off of him with his shield. With a loud 'BANG' the man collapses the the floor.
The man then leg sweeps Cap. Cap upper cuts him and throws him across the room.

The two stand on opposite sides of a table. The man throws the table on to Cap, and takes out his gun.
"Like I said...you're dead."
Just then, Caps shield goes flying up and hits him in the face.
Cap notices red seeping through his . "Bleeding already?"
"No, American...this is not blood."
Cap lunges at him and hits him with a left and right cross.
The man knees Cap in the groin. Cap falls down ward, and the man hits him with an uppercut.
Cap grabs his arm and puts it over his shoulder. Using it as leverage, he throws him throught the entrance. The man attacks him, pushing him backwards with a series of punches and kicks. Finally, he beats Cap over the ledge. He survives by hanging on to the railing.
"Cap!" He hears a familiar voice!
"Fury?!" Cap grimaces in pain as the man stomps on his hand.
"We're coming, Cap! Better hurry! We've set the place to blow!
"Don't need help! says Captain America. "I've got it handled."
With a strong heave of his leg, he grabs the man between his thighs and throws him over the edge.
Nick Fury arrives and helps him up.
"Not gonna let ya go, Cap." Just as they get out a giant explosion consumes the Fortress.

Just after all the troops leave...he timed it...he was waiting underneath the rubble. Out of the wreckage...

...comes a man with a Red Skull
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#3  Edited By OracleX

I like it. Nice action scenes. My only quip: "guess I'm one of a kind" sounds kind of cocky for a guy trying to make others comfortable with the fact that he has been made to be a superior soldier. Don't obsess over it, what Steve has said in the trailers hasn't impressed me either.

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#5  Edited By CapFanboy
@primepower53: Good action scenes and the only problem was the one oracle said