Batman Beyond: Battle for the Cowl

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My name is Terry McGinnis, I was a couple days ago I was flying through Gotham, when something,  or someone pounced on me. When I hit the ground, I stood up to see it was a man dressed in Bruce's Bat costume. He claimed to be his son. Damian - something. We battle for A while and I was able to get the drop on him when I hit him with an electrucuting Batarang. Then three more people came. They were all dressed as Batmen. One came for me and said his name was Jason. As he was swinging I used a techinque I had been practicing. Using his body weight against him. He missed and fell to the ground. The next one claimed to be Dick Grayson. i jumped up and kicked him in the chin, knocking him into a guy called Tim Drake. I knew I had to escape, to get help. So I flew away. I asked Bruce if he knew who those people were, and he told me they were all once his sidekicks. He told me about how I needed to go back in time, because this happened to him. He didn't give any specifics, though. So I went back in time like he told me. To a time where Bruce was Batman......

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I went to the past to warn Bruce about what was going to happen. Although it seems that these "Batmen" gott there first. Bruce was nearly on the ground, so I tackled Damian and kicked Tim. Dick (Who seemed like the leader.) Told Jason to help him with Bruce, and for Tim and Damian to go after me. Damain ran at me but I jumped over him and he fell into Tim. Bruce was able to take on The others pretty easily. He warned them that they forgot what he taught them. They attacked him together, but Bruce disarmed them with a chop to the neck. Never knew he was so good. Gotta focus, I thought to myself. Damian had thrown and explosive Batarang. I threw one to match, and it exploded in midair, with Tim in between. Damian and I went at it, He was stronger than I thought he would be. Have to do this, have to do this...I thought to myself. I finally let go and Damain went headfirst into a wall. Jason and Dick were no match for Bruce, apparentley they had forgotten everything they learned abouyt fighting exept the basics. It was then that I noticed that there was a tiny pin on the neck of Dick. I saw it on Jason too. I knelt down and saw that Tim didn't have one, it probably fell off during the explosion, since Damain had one. They seemed futuristic. Even for my era. It was thenI remembered about that time warping villain. Before I could finish my thought We were all in a Roman colliseum. I remembered his name. It was Chronos.

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#3  Edited By ComicStooge

Pretty cool.

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#4  Edited By batkevin74

@primepower53: Found some ancient history :)

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#5  Edited By tomdickharry1984

Cool

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#6  Edited By TheCannon

Meh.

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@tomdickharry1984 said:

Cool

thanks.

@TheCannon said:

Meh.

WTF was the reason for posting this?!

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#8  Edited By TheCannon

@primepower53 said:

@TheCannon said:

Meh.

WTF was the reason for posting this?!

To give you my opinion.

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@batkevin74 said:

@primepower53: Found some ancient history :)

REALLY ANCIENT! Hadn't even learned proper line spacing yet.

Amazing what happens in two years.

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@TheCannon said:

@primepower53 said:

@TheCannon said:

Meh.

WTF was the reason for posting this?!

To give you my opinion.

Except that when you give a BAD OPINION, it's usually goes along with JUSTIFICATION AND CRITICISM as to why you didn't like it.

Plus this was two years ago. You gave the same response to another fic. Are you saying my writing hasn't improved in two years?

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#11  Edited By TheCannon

@primepower53 said:

@TheCannon said:

@primepower53 said:

@TheCannon said:

Meh.

WTF was the reason for posting this?!

To give you my opinion.

Except that when you give a BAD OPINION, it's usually goes along with JUSTIFICATION AND CRITICISM as to why you didn't like it.

Plus this was two years ago. You gave the same response to another fic. Are you saying my writing hasn't improved in two years?

I have have read work of yours I like. I just didn't like this particular one.

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@TheCannon: yes. I realize that. I'm asking WHY you didn't like it.

If you're going to insult my work (however old it may be) AT LEAST have the courtesy to be prepared to back up that statement

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#13  Edited By TheCannon

@primepower53 It's too short, it's in first person, there should be more than just Terry talking, etc.

Overall it wasn't bad, but it needs something.

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@TheCannon said:

@primepower53 It's too short, it's in first person, there should be more than just Terry talking, etc.

Overall it wasn't bad, but it needs something.

like what?

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#15  Edited By CapFanboy

@primepower53 said:

@TheCannon said:

@primepower53 It's too short, it's in first person, there should be more than just Terry talking, etc.

Overall it wasn't bad, but it needs something.

like what?

Cage at Wendy's.

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@CapFanboy said:

@primepower53 said:

@TheCannon said:

@primepower53 It's too short, it's in first person, there should be more than just Terry talking, etc.

Overall it wasn't bad, but it needs something.

like what?

Cage at Wendy's.

Well OBVIOUSLY! How could I not have seen that!?

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#17  Edited By Wolfshead

-Sighs; I'm staying away from Fanfictions for awhile.

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@Wolfshead said:

-Sighs; I'm staying away from Fanfictions for awhile.

IT WAS WRITTEN TWO YEARS AGO!

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#19  Edited By Wolfshead

Caption locks are unnecessary.

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#20  Edited By CapFanboy

@Wolfshead said:

Caption locks are unnecessary.

Caps doesn't stand for caption...

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@CapFanboy said:

@Wolfshead said:

Caption locks are unnecessary.

Caps doesn't stand for caption...

I'M ADDICTED TO CAPS LOCK!

*ahem* sorry.

I just....sorry.

*bows head in shame*

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#22  Edited By 4donkeyjohnson

Ahhh a super hero fan-fic by primepower53!! HUZZAH! Now looking at the date, its quite old but regardless. This is good (some grammatical and spacing errors) but using it as reference from where you've progessed to, it is outstanding! I never was a big Batman Beyond fan (no Bruce, no real spark in my opininon; even when Dick & Azrael play dress up its not quite right) but the idea is sound. Good job. And it's a fan-fic with super heroes (as opposed to fiction, what you've been writing lately) :) :P

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@4donkeyjohnson said:

Ahhh a super hero fan-fic by primepower53!! HUZZAH! Now looking at the date, its quite old but regardless. This is good (some grammatical and spacing errors) but using it as reference from where you've progessed to, it is outstanding! I never was a big Batman Beyond fan (no Bruce, no real spark in my opininon; even when Dick & Azrael play dress up its not quite right) but the idea is sound. Good job. And it's a fan-fic with super heroes (as opposed to fiction, what you've been writing lately) :) :P

thanks.

Upon reading it. I notice the change as well.