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Cover: The font really sets the tone. I also happen to love the fearless expression of Rose while she's in the Scarecrow's hand, which I find already a little telling of her character. Using the blade as a divider was also a cool idea. Scarecrow's pinky is awkwardly positioned much further out than the other four fingers are spaced. Rose's bust looks to be a little too far to the the left. I also prefer the black eyepatch to the white one that she occasionally sports.
Page 1: I like the decision to keep the first page plain as far as paneling and word bubbles. In comics that's usually where the artist starts the conversation that the writer will eventually finish. The brightness on the first two pictures was good; the only downside for me is that the background seemed to have more detail than the foreground which is a little bizarre.
Page 2: The top panel should have 3 panels instead of two. One in the middle to indicate why Dick would suspect someone in his house. The action was brief but great! I also liked the flirty one-liner at the end.
Page 3: Good timing to bring up the Titans as a reference. The facial expressions should be less homogenous. I'd recommend having the characters occasionally open and close their mouths in different panels (at least twice).
Page 6: The bar could use a little more detail beneath the shelves under Rose (a few glasses, a shotgun, a baseball bat, things like that). The men's faces being vague in the distance was well done, as well as the changed expression when money came up. You could make money bold, although it's fine the way it is.
Page 8: Blüdhaven is missing an umlaut over the u. Liked the inversion on the word bubbles on the top panel. The shading is superb throughout this page.
Page 9: Mr. Dagget could be put in bold if he is a relevant character to this issue. Their banter works well and is complemented by the goons' dialogue.
Page 10: That last panel is epic!
So nice job. Wish I had more to say about the writing, but maybe that means you're doing well.
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