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@InnerVenom123: 1. Will do.

2-4. :DDDDDDD

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@KisserNe: Thanks in advance. I'm not in a hurry.

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FOR PART 1/3:

http://www.comicvine.com/forums/fan-fic/8/spider-man-the-ballad-of-jimmy-6-issue-13-script/646230/#4

RATED M - For violence and profanity

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PAGE 1.

1.1/ Jimmy sits alone at a table in front of the Coffee Bean. There’s a coffee and an issue of the Daily Bugle on the table in front of him.

CAPTION: Now.

1.2/ Cross walks down the street towards Jimmy. His hair is grayer and thinner, but he’s still trying to pull of the cool gangster look.

NO DIALOGUE

1.3/ Cross sits at the table.

CROSS: Y’know, last night was one thing.

CROSS: Not saying I approve, but you did what you had to do.

1.4/ Jimmy takes a sip of his coffee.

CROSS (off-panel): But what’s the &%@#in’ world coming to when you wanna talk business over &%@#in’ coffee?

1.5/ Jimmy puts down the cup. Some of the other patrons are glaring at Cross.

JIMMY: I wanted a real cup of New York coffee. Remind me of old times.

JIMMY (small text): This corporate %@#& ain’t getting the job done.

1.6/ Jimmy looks in the window of the coffee shop at a couple sitting at a booth.

CROSS: We got &%@#in’ plastered in old times!

JIMMY: Different old times.

PAGE 2.

2.1/ Cut to Jimmy sitting at a booth like the one in 1.6, talking on a flip-open cell phone. He’s still the same size, but looks slightly younger. The coffee shop looks completely different, with a much more family-owned vibe. The name “The Daily Grind” is written on the other side of the window. Once again, Jimmy has a coffee and a Daily Bugle in front of him.

CAPTION: Then…

JIMMY: The &%@# you callin’ me for?

2.2/ Angelo sits in his room, on the phone. He’s in his mid to late teens now, though still very thin.

ANGELO: Dad’s &%@#ing pissed, man. Said he could’ve killed Spider-Man if you hadn’t stabbed him in the back.

ANGELO: Any of it true?

2.3/ Close up of Jimmy’s annoyed face.

JIMMY: What’your point?

ANGELO (phone): YOU DID!?!

2.4/ Close up of Angelo, looking smug.

JIMMY (phone): It wasn’t just the bug. He was gonna start executing civilians next. I wasn’t gonna look the other way.

ANGELO: Yeah, but this ain’t the first time you let Spider-Man slide. Dad says you’ve picked your side now.

ANGELO: Sounds like he’ll put a hit on your ass this time.

2.5/ Jimmy looks down at his paper, which has big picture of Spider-Man (Ben Reilly) next to one of a middle-aged man with blonde hair in a business suit. The headline reads “WALL-CRAWLER OUTS JOHNSMEYER IN SUPERHUMAN GAMBLING RING by Ken Ellis” A small note under the picture of Spidey says “(Stock Photo by Jessica Carradine)”

JIMMY: Mind telling me what’s your &%@#ing point?

ANGELO (phone): Nothing, just…

ANGELO (phone): Don’t think dad remembers you have this number. I just…

PAGE 3.

3.1/ Jimmy hangs up the phone.

ANGELO (phone): I just wanted to know if it was really tr—

SFX:deet

JIMMY: Get a &%@#in’ life.

3.2/ Ben Reilly walks up to Jimmy’s table. He has several bruises on his face and is wearing a coffee stained apron.

BEN: Jimmy?

BEN: Thought I heard you scaring away customers out here.

3.3/ Ben sits at the table.

JIMMY: Sorry Ben. Rough week.

BEN: It’s cool. Can you just… Tone down the Al Pacino thing a little? We get families in here.

BEN (small text): And if the boss sees me like this and with you, she’ll think I’m really Tombstone or something.

3.4/ Jimmy points at Ben’s face.

JIMMY: What happened?

BEN: Huh? Oh, just… Stuff. Y’know. My week wasn’t so hot either.

3.5/ Jimmy glaresat Ben.

JIMMY: Don’t give me that %@#&.

BEN (small text): More toned down…

JIMMY: You know what I do, I do because of my family.

3.6/ Ben gets a tiny smirk.

JIMMY (off-panel): I was born into trouble. You weren’t. Keep out of it.

PAGE 4.

4.1/ Back to Jimmy and Cross in present day.

CAPTION: Now.

CROSS: Whatever, man.

CROSS: What’s this about?

4.2/ Jimmy holds his coffee up to his mouth, about to drink it.

JIMMY: I need to pull a few more jobs. High profile. Some of ‘em need help.

4.3/ Cross.

CROSS: Higher profile than the old man?

CROSS: %@#&, who we talkin’?

4.4/ Jimmy leans in.

NO DIALOGUE

PAGE 5.

5.1/ FULL-PAGE SPREAD. Just a big shot of Jimmy from the front.

JIMMY: Norman Osborn.

PAGE 6.

6.1/ Cross stares in shock.

NO DIALOGUE

6.2/ Same as 6.1.

NO DIALOGUE

6.3/ Same as 6.1.

NO DIALOGUE

6.4/ Same as 6.1.

NO DIALOGUE

6.5/ Cross gets a slightly annoyed, slightly amused look.

CROSS: YOU &%@#IN’ KIDDING ME?

PAGE 7.

7.1/ Jimmy looks frustrated.

JIMMY: Quiet down!

JIMMY: You’re connected. I know it’s a lot—

CROSS (off-panel): No %@#& it’s a lot!

7.2/ Cross is clearly cracking up.

CROSS: Ever since he got out, everyone on the &%@#in’ planet’s been looking for ‘im.

CROSS: &%@# that, maybe more. S.H.I.E.L.D.’s probably got mother &%@#ers diggin’ for him on Mars.

7.3/ Cross picks up and drinks Jimmy’s coffee, annoying Jimmy further.

CROSS: No &%@#in’ way in Hell you’ll find him sleepin’ in his bed in Manhattan.

7.4/ Jimmy snatches his coffee back.

JIMMY: But he has a kid, ri—

CROSS: You think that kid blinks without S.H.I.E.L.D. knowin’?

7.5/ Cross gets a more friendly smile.

CROSS: Just wait for the freaks to find him. What’s your stake in it?

PAGE 8.

8.1/ Close up of a framed picture of Ben Reilly, standing next to an urn.

CAPTION: Then…

8.2/ A crowd of mourners stand around the table with the urn and the picture, which is revealed to be in the living room of May Parker’s old house.

NO DIALOGUE

8.3/ Jimmy stands in the living room doorway.

NO DIALOGUE

PAGE 9.

9.1/ Back to Jimmy and Cross in the present.

JIMMY: It’s for a friend.

CROSS: With no leads? Jesus, what the &%@# is he paying you?

9.2/ Jimmy looks down at his paper.

JIMMY: If you can’t help me, doesn’t matter.

CROSS (off-panel): That wasn’t the only job though, right?

9.3/ Cross starts chuckling some more.

JIMMY (off-panel): There’s one more I might need you on.

CROSS: Who else is your buddy tired of? Doctor Doom? Galactus?

9.4/ Close up on Jimmy’s face.

JIMMY: Venom.

PAGE 10.

10.1/ Cross suddenly looks serious.

NO DIALOGUE

10.2/ Same as 10.1.

CROSS: That’s what all this is?

10.3/ Jimmy just glares.

PAGE 11.

11.1/ Jimmy gets out of bed in a small New York apartment at night. His wife, Mary, is asleep in the bed.

CAPTION: Then…

11.2/ Jimmy stands on the roof of the apartment building, smoking a cigarette.

NO DIALOGUE

11.3/ Close up of Jimmy’s face, looking calm.

NO DIALOGUE

11.4/ Same shot as 11.3, but a large impact behind Jimmy shakes him.

SFX: THOOOOOOM

11.5/ Jimmy turns around, pulling a gun.

NO DIALOGUE

PAGE 12.

12.1/ Huge panel of Venom (Angelo) as he grabs Jimmy’s wrist, making him drop the gun.

VENOM: You &%@#in’ serious?

12.2/ Close up of Venom’s face as the symbiote peels back partially, revealing Angelo.

VENOM: You think you can hurt me?

PAGE 13.

13.1/ Jimmy’s completely surprised.

JIMMY: What…

JIMMY: Angelo, what the &%@# is this?

13.2/ Angelo lets go of Jimmy, his face covered again, and now with a big toothy smile.

VENOM: Dad needs a man on the frontlines.

VENOM: It’s my turn.

13.3/ Jimmy gets up close to Venom.

JIMMY: YOU TURNED YOURSELF INTO THIS FOR THAT OLD BASTARD!?!

13.4/ Venom punches Jimmy in the face, which actually sends him flying a few feet back.

SFX: CRKKK

PAGE 14.

14.1/ Jimmy lies on his back, holding his broken, bleeding nose.

VENOM (off-panel): I’d never get as big or as good as you.

VENOM (off-panel): &%@#, even if I did, dad’d still miss you.

14.2/ Venom approaches Jimmy.

VENOM: But I’m worth more than you now.

VENOM: I’m &%@#ing invincible!

14.3/ Venom Crouches down to smile at Jimmy eye to eye.

JIMMY: So you gonna &%@#in’ kill me already?

VENOM: Mmmmmmmm… Not now.

14.4/ Venom envelops Jimmy in a web cocoon from the neck down.

VENOM: First I’m just gonna make sure you don’t run…

14.5/ Venom walks away from Jimmy, towards the edge of the roof.

VENOM: …And I’m gonna go kill your buddy Spider-Man.

VENOM: Then I’ll take you back to dad…

14.6/ Venom jumps incredibly high and far off the roof.

VENOM: …So he can watch!

PAGE 15.

15.1/ Back to Jimmy and Cross in present day.

JIMMY: It’s my business.

CROSS: Kid, I watched them sweep up the body!

CROSS: I was there when your Dad placed the hi--

15.2/ Jimmy looks madder than ever.

JIMMY: SO WILL YOU HELP ME!?

15.3/ Cross shouts back.

CROSS: WHY SHOULD I!?

CROSS: Angelo and the old man knew what they signed up for. If it didn’t end how they wanted, too &%@#in’ bad. Got what they deserved.

15.4/ Jimmy stands out of his seat.

JIMMY: ANGELO DIDN’T…

15.5/ Jimmy pauses, angrily.

JIMMY:

15.6/ Jimmy Calms down slightly.

JIMMY: &%@# this. Someone knows where Eddie Brock went after that Spider-Island %@#&. He’ll know where that thing is.

PAGE 16.

16.1/ Jimmy begins to walk away, but Cross stands too.

CROSS: Wait!

16.2/ Jimmy turns to face Cross.

CROSS: There’s a reporter for the Bugle. Ken Ellis. Used to tail Brock back in the day.

CROSS: Some of my guys say he’s been getting tips on a string of Venom sightings, but some government-types keep shooting his stories down.

16.3/ Jimmy narrows his eyes, untrusting.

JIMMY: You know this by memory?

CROSS (off-panel): After Angelo, we’ve been keeping our eyes on it.

16.4/ Cross takes a phone out of his pocket.

CROSS: Give me five minutes, I can set up a private meet with Ellis.

CROSS: Deal?

16.5/ Jimmy still looks untrusting.

JIMMY: Make the call.

PAGE 17.

17.1/ Jimmy stands on a random, tall rooftop, looking at the sunset.

NO DIALOGUE

17.2/ Jimmy turns to see Ken Ellis, a middle aged, brown haired man in a standard brown trench coat, climbing up the fire escape on the other side of the building.

ELLIS: This tip better be worth a Pulitzer, man. I’m too old to be…

17.3/ Close up of Ellis’s somewhat discomforted face.

ELLIS: …Oh.

17.4/ Ellis calmly walks up to Jimmy.

ELLIS: Giacomo Fortunato. A.K.A. Jimmy-6, maggia hitman. Brother to the deceased Angelo Fortunato, and son to the very recently deceased Vincente Fortunato.

ELLIS: Is this a confession, or…

PAGE 18.

18.1/ Jimmy grabs the back of Ellis’s head with his massive hand, and knees him hard in the gut.

SFX: THUMP

ELLIS: AHHH!

18.2/ Ellis lies crumpled up on his side, while Jimmy nudges him with his foot to get him on his back.

JIMMY: What do you know about Venom?

18.3/ Ellis lies on his back, wincing slightly, as Jimmy rests his enormous foot on his chest.

ELLIS: WHAT? WHAT THE &%@# DOES THAT HAVE TO DO WITH—

18.4/ Same shot as 18.3, but Jimmy presses his foot down slightly, putting Ellis in extreme pain.

SFX:krik

ELLIS: AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!

18.5/ Jimmy looks down, his face cold and empty.

JIMMY: I’ll keep breaking ribs until you give me something.

PAGE 19.

19.1/ Ellis looks toward Jimmy and chuckles.

ELLIS: Heh…

ELLIS: Shouldn’t have let me…

ELLIS: Heheheh…

19.2/ Close up of Jimmy’s burning eyes.

SFX:krik

ELLIS (off-panel): AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!

JIMMY: Let you what?!

19.3/ Close up of Ellis’s mouth.

ELLIS (small text): Pick this roof to meet…

ELLIS (small text): He patrols it all the time…

19.4/ Jimmy is suddenly surprised to hear a voice behind him.

???: Jimmy?

PAGE 20.

20.1/ FULL-PAGE SPREAD. Jimmy turns to see Spider-Man crouched in a classic pose on the other side of the rooftop.

SPIDER-MAN: THE BALLAD OF JIMMY-6

ACT 2. VITA

CREDITS

Disclaimer: None of the characters featured (aside from Cross, but who cares) are my own creations. Those rights fall squarely onto Marvel Comics and ect. I make no profit from this.

FOR PART 3/3:

http://www.comicvine.com/forums/fan-fic/8/spider-man-the-ballad-of-jimmy-6-issue-33-script/647006/

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#6  Edited By ColonelRunAway

@InnerVenom123:

1. I tried my best, but I have a lot of trouble turning that off. xD I'll go back over it.

2.Yeah, that was for you. Couldn't resist.

3. Will fix.

4. I don't think I understand what you mean.

5. :D Yes.

6. :D

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#7  Edited By ColonelRunAway

Hey guys, I'm new 'round here, but I'm a longtime friend and supporter of InnerVenom123, and I figured I should probably post some of my work in a more public place, so here I am diving headfirst into this site! Please enjoy and lend any constructive criticism!

RATED M - For violence and profanity

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PAGE 1.

1.1/ An exterior view of a New York City penthouse apartment at night.

CAPTION: Now.

1.2/ A close up of a life support monitor in a dark room, displaying a fairly rapid heartbeat.

DON FORTUNATO (off-panel): MY BOYS!!!

1.3/ Two well dressed men stand in front of a detailed wooden door. The first looks concerned, but the second is just annoyed.

DON FORTUNATO (behind the door): BRING ME MY BOYS!!!

MAN 1: Christ…

1.4/ The second man opens the door.

MAN 2: More of this %@#&?

PAGE 2.

2.1/ Front view of the two men as they enter a dark master bedroom.

MAN 1: Your boys aren’t comin’, Don!

2.2/ Large panel of Don Fortunato lying in a massive bed. He’s extremely old, thin and bald, with an eye patch covering his right eye. On one side of his bed there’s a life support machine, while there’s a table with a few framed photos on the other.

DON FORTUNATO: I NEED TO SEE MY BOYS!!! WHERE THE &%@# ARE YOU KEEPIN’ THEM!?!

PAGE 3.

3.1/ The second man hands Fortunato one of the picture frames.

MAN 2: Here, Don. Your boys are right here.

3.2/ Fortunato holds the picture and glares at it.

NO DIALOGUE

3.3/ Fortunato throws the picture at the second man, but it misses and smashes into the wall behind him.

SFX:KRISH

DON FORTUNATO: YOU &%@#IN’ BASTARDS!!!

3.4/ The two men turn to the exit while Fortunato points and shouts at them.

DON FORTUNATO: YOU ALL THINK I’M &%@#IN’ LOSING IT!!! YOU JUST WANNA SIT AN’ WATCH ME DIE SO YOU CAN TAKE THE &%@#IN’ FAMILY FOR YOURSELVES!!!

DON FORTUNATO: KEEPIN’ ME AWAY FROM MY OWN FLESH AND &%@#IN’ BLOOD!!!

3.5/ The two men walk out the door.

DON FORTUNATO: GET OUT!!!

DON FORTUNATO: GET THE &%@# OUT OF MY SIGHT!!!

PAGE 4.

4.1/ Fortunato sits alone in his dark bed.

SFX: SLAM

4.2/ Fortunato turns to look at the wall that was hit by the picture.

NO DIALOGUE

4.3/ We see the picture lying on the floor in its broken frame, displaying the two Fortunato sons Jimmy and Angelo. Jimmy is in his early twenties, tall and just slightly chubby, and wearing an army uniform (desert storm era). Angelo is closer to ten, also fairly thin, and looks bored and frustrated. Both have black hair.

DON FORTUNATO (off-panel): My boys…

4.4/ Close up on Jimmy’s face.

NO DIALOGUE

PAGE 5.

5.1/ Jimmy stands in the JFK international airport, with his face in the same position as in 4.4. He’s still wearing his uniform and is carrying a large duffle bag.

CAPTION: Then…

JIMMY: Hey! Cross!

5.2/ Jimmy walks up to Cross, a man with dark greasy hair and a three-piece suit, holding up a sign with “GIACOMO” written on it.

JIMMY: You chauffeuring now?

CROSS: You been in that backwards Hell for months. Your Dad wanted ya to see a friendly face when you got home.

5.3/ Jimmy and Cross walk outside towards a black Cadillac.

JIMMY: How’s business been going?

CROSS: Fisk’s worse than ever.

CROSS: He’s too big to fight, so now the families are all kissing his ass for permission to wipe theirs.

5.4/ Jimmy puts his bag in the trunk of the car.

JIMMY: Dad ain’t holding out anymore?

CROSS (off-panel): Nah, but you wouldn’t know it the way he talks.

5.5/ Cross gets in the driver’s seat while Jimmy gets in the front passenger seat.

CROSS: Makes it sound like he’s gonna &%@#in’ napalm the tubby @#&%$.

PAGE 6.

6.1/ Interior of the car. Jimmy looks in the rear view mirror to see Angelo sitting in the back, not making eye contact.

JIMMY: What’s the kid doin’ here?

CROSS: I told ya. Your dad wanted you to see friendly faces when you got home. Ain’t your own brother friendly?

6.2/ Close up on Angelo’s face.

JIMMY (off-panel): No. What’s the kid doin’ here?

CROSS (off-panel): Cicero’s over for a chat. Your Dad didn’t want him in the way.

6.3/ Angelo shouts at Jimmy, who turns and glares at him.

ANGELO: I wasn’t gon--

JIMMY: Shut the &%@# up, Angelo.

6.4/ Cross glances at Jimmy.

CROSS: They’ll still be talkin’ for a good hour. Wanna get a drink, man?

6.5/ Exterior of the car as it drives into the city.

JIMMY: Hell, I could use it.

CROSS: Great. You can tell me ‘bout the %@#& you went through.

PAGE 7.

7.1/ Cut back to the two men walking down the hall in Fortunato’s apartment.

CAPTION: Now.

MAN 2: Shoulda defected years ago.

7.2/ The two enter a massive living room.

MAN 1: To who? Fisk? The Hood? Mister Negative? That psycho with the S.H.I.E.L.D. robots?

MAN 2: I hear that guy’s got a cousin that’s still in business.

MAN 1: For what, a month? He’ll go down with the rest soon. But Fortunato’s lasted decades.

7.3/ The second man goes into the kitchen.

MAN 2: ‘Cuz he was a &%@#in’ joke.

7.4/ The second man pours a drink into a shot glass.

MAN 2: He needed his kids and H.Y.D.R.A. just to get the wall-crawler’s attention. Hasn’t been on anyone’s radar since.

7.5/ The first man gets ready to sit in a chair.

MAN 1: Yeah, %@#&head.

MAN 1: Better to be set and quiet than rich and in the Punisher’s si--

SFX:ding

PAGE 8.

8.1/ Both men turn to look at the elevator.

NO DIALOGUE

8.2/ The first man walks up to the elevator.

NO DIALOGUE

8.3/
The second man crouches behind a kitchen cabinet.

NO DIALOGUE

8.4/ The elevator doors begin to open, with only a tie visible. The person wearing it is clearly very fat though.

SFX:shk

PAGE 9.

9.1/ POV from inside the elevator as the first man is now visible through the mostly open doors. He’s terrified and reaching for his gun.

MAN 1: SHIT!

9.2/ Profile view of the first man as an abnormally large bullet tears through his chest before he can get his gun out.

SFX: BLAM

9.3/ Front view of the elevator as the first man crumples to the ground. Inside the elevator, one can only see the silhouette of what looks to be the Kingpin.

SFX: FWUMP

PAGE 10.

10.1/ The second man peeks out from behind his cover.

NO DIALOGUE

10.2/ The silhouetted “Kingpin” walks further into the room.

NO DIALOGUE

10.3/ The second man sits with his back against the cabinet, holding out a small handgun.

NO DIALOGUE

10.4/ Front view of the second man as he jumps out of cover, angry and ready to pull the trigger.

MAN 2: AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!

PAGE 11.

11.1/ POV looking down the barrel of a huge gun.

NO DIALOGUE

11.2/ Profile of the second man as he stares in complete shock at an enormous handgun, with the barrel almost as big as his face, being held just an inch from his nose. The “Kingpin’s” gigantic hand is in the shot, holding the gun.

MAN 2 (small text): --urk--

PAGE 12.

12.1/ Don Fortunato looks at the door to his room.

SFX: BLAM

12.2/ Overhead of Fortunato as he cracks a small smile.

DON FORTUNATO (small text): My boy…

12.3/ Close up on Fortunato’s face in 12.2, as his smile grows.

DON FORTUNATO (small text): Fighting Fisk…

12.4/ Close up on Fortunato again, now just showing his large smile. The few teeth he has are mostly yellow.

DON FORTUNATO (small text): Taking back what’s ours…

PAGE 13.

13.1/ Cut to a younger Don Fortunato smiling. He has all of his teeth and some dark hair, though it’s thinning. He’s sitting in a large dining room.

CAPTION: Then…

DON FORTUNATO: He thinks he’s &%@#ing God!

13.2/ Full view of the room, showing that Jimmy and Angelo are sitting at a large table with Fortunato, eating some fine cuisine.

DON FORTUNATO: And I’m the only one with the cojones to fight ‘im!

13.3/ Jimmy looks at Fortunato while Angelo refuses to look up from his plate.

JIMMY: You’ve taken down worse, dad.

DON FORTUNATO (off-panel): No.

DON FORTUNATO (off-panel): I haven’t.

13.4/ Fortunato gestures toward Jimmy with his fork.

DON FORTUNATO: The only ones who ever get close to Fisk are the queers in the spandex.

DON FORTUNATO: Even they can’t win.

PAGE 14.

14.1/ Jimmy glances down at his food.

JIMMY: Alright. I can put off my third tour. Then what?

14.2/ Don Fortunato gets a huge smile as he stands out of his chair.

DON FORTUNATO: Hey, for now, don’t worry about it.

DON FORTUNATO: I’ll tell Cross to find you the best specialists in the country to get you ready.

14.3/ Fortunato walks toward Jimmy.

JIMMY: Specialists?

DON FORTUNATO: Heh.

14.4/ Fortunato stands behind Jimmy’s chairs and puts his hands on Jimmy’s shoulders.

DON FORTUNATO: Desert Storm was the training wheels, son.

14.5/ Fortunato whispers into Jimmy’s ear.

DON FORTUNATO: Now you’re in the Kingpin’s war.

PAGE 15.

15.1/ The silhouetted “Kingpin” opens the door leading into Fortunato’s bedroom.

CAPTION: Now.

SFX:sqeeeeeeeeee

15.2/ The “Kingpin’s” shadow eclipses Fortunato, who’s eyes are closed. He almost looks dead.

NO DIALOGUE

15.3/ Close up on Fortunato’s face, eye’s still closed.

“KINGPIN”: Wake up.

15.4/ Same as 15.3/ but Fortunato is now opening his eyes and Smiling.

DON FORTUNATO (small text): Heh…

DON FORTUNATO (small text): My boy…

PAGE 16.

16.1/ FULL-PAGE SPREAD. We see the “Kingpin” standing over Fortunato’s bed in full detail, and can now see that while he has the same build as the Kingpin, he’s only in his thirties and has a black ponytail. He is in fact Jimmy.

DON FORTUNATO (small text): My beautiful Giacomo…

PAGE 17.

17.1/ Close up on Jimmy’s face. He’s furious.

JIMMY: Hey dad.

17.2/ Close up on Don Fortunato’s face. He’s thrilled.

DON FORTUNATO (small text): Ha! You’re really here this time! I knew these &%@#s couldn’t keep you from me!

17.3/ Same as 17.2, but Jimmy’s hand can be seen pulling on the pillow under Fortunato’s head.

DON FORTUNATO (small text): Where’s your brother? Where’s Ange… Ah, &%@# ‘im!

17.4/ Same as 17.3, but Jimmy has now pulled the pillow further out from under Fortunato’s head.

DON FORTUNATO (small text): As long as you’re here, the family’ll live forever…

17.5/ Same as 17.4, but now the pillow and Jimmy’s hand are completely gone.

DON FORTUNATO (small text): We’ll take the whole goddamn city…

17.6/ Same as 17.5, but now Jimmy is holding the pillow over Fortunato’s face.

DON FORTUNATO (small text): Fisk… The Maggia…

PAGE 18.

18.1/ Same as 17.1.

DON FORTUNATO (small text, off-panel): Spider-M--

DON FORTUNATO (off-panel): Mrrrgh! MRRRRRRGGGGHHHH!!!

18.2/ Same as 17.6, But Jimmy is finally smothering Fortunato, who’s too weak to struggle against it.

DON FORTUNATO: MMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGHHHHHHHHH!!!

18.3/ Same as 18.2.

DON FORTUNATO: MRRRRGH!

DON FORTUNATO: MRRRRGH!

DON FORTUNATO: MRRRRGH!

DON FORTUNATO: MRRRRGH!

18.4/ Same as 18.3.

DON FORTUNATO: HRRRRRRM MGGGGGGH!

DON FORTUNATO: HRRRRRRM MGGGGGGH!

18.5/ Same as 18.4.

DON FORTUNATO: Hrrrrrrm mggggggh…

DON FORTUNATO (small text): Hrrrrrrm mggggggh…

18.6/ Same as 18.5.

NO DIALOGUE.

PAGE 19.

19.1/ Jimmy walks away from the bed.

NO DIALOGUE

19.2/ Jimmy walks into the living room, reaching into his pocket.

NO DIALOGUE

19.3/ Jimmy stands in front of the elevator, dialing a cell phone.

SFX: DEET-DEET-DEET

19.4/ Jimmy enters the elevator, holding the phone to his ear.

JIMMY: Cross, it’s Jimmy Fortunato.

PAGE 20.

20.1/ FULL-PAGE SPREAD. Jimmy stands in the elevator as the doors close, with the first man’s bleeding corpse on the floor outside of it.

JIMMY: I need your help.

SPIDER-MAN: THE BALLAD OF JIMMY-6

ACT 1. NASCITA

CREDITS

Disclaimer: None of the characters featured (aside from Cross, but who cares) are my own creations. Those rights fall squarely onto Marvel Comics and ect. I make no profit from this.

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http://www.comicvine.com/forums/fan-fic/8/spider-man-the-ballad-of-jimmy-6-issue-23-script/646486/#3

FOR PART 3/3:

http://www.comicvine.com/forums/fan-fic/8/spider-man-the-ballad-of-jimmy-6-issue-33-script/647006/

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@The Dark Huntress said:

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If you've ever taken the time to talk with him, or heck, even had him @reply you, you will know that this guy knows his comics. He's primarily Marvel and mostly a fan of the anti-heroes and an expert on all things Venom, as his username would have you believe. However, not only is he incredibly knowledgeable, personable and hilarious. He's also ridiculously creative and by everything that makes sense in the universe, should one day be a comic book writer himself.

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  • Deadpool: Operation "OH S#@&!" (1, 2, 3, 4)
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What she said.