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Martian Manhunter (A Space Odyssey Inspired by the Nolanverse) Part 1

This is the first part of my epic dark and gritty take on The Martian Manhunter Mythology. Its a lead up to how I envision a justice league movie should be done.

Martian Manhunter: Space Odessy (A film treatment inspired by the Nolanverse)

Director: Ridley Scott or Duncan Jones


Jónn Jónnz - Martianman hunter

K´hym - daughter

M"yrr"ah - Wife

M´ymm - Mother

Shasheen - Father

Dr. Saul Erdel - Brilliant Physicist, Engineer And Radio Astronomer

Dr. Amanda Waller - Secretary of defense for the United States. Head of CIA covert operations Intelligence Angency Cadmus

Dr. Lee - Erdel´s colleague and Astro Physicist

President James Reagen - Son of Ronald reagan and current US president.

Maa´le´fak - MMH twin brother. not identical

Protex - Leader Of The Imperium another alien race

The High Priest Venga Sal - Supreme leader MMH´s quadrant on the planet Maáleca´Andra

To´zar - High Priests Venga Sal´s Advisor

Zen´Ta´Rham - High priests advisor, second in line to rule The Seven Councils and Imperial capital


Dr. Ivo - Professor Of Nano technology

Batman/Bruce Wayne - Billionaire philanthropist by day, distributor of street justice by night

Dr. Harley Quinzel - Psychiatrist, Neurologist, expert in the field of psychopathy and childhood trauma


(The following images are all photo real)

We are presented with a galaxy, much like our own, but with two stars at it´s center.

We focus on one planet. This drifting orb is the fourth one away from the two suns. As we watch its elliptical movement around the stars, we notice it is like a giant Earth, with atmosphere, water, clearly defined territories. We hover over this familiar yet strange planet a while. Observing it with curiosity.

Cut to.

Now inside the planet, we take a wide-angle shot, floating down from the atmosphere. We see that the planet has a whole complex ecosystem of its own. It is an expansive area of rain forest and streams, with a hot to humid tropical temperature, slightly light even though it is night.

Now a more intimate shot of the alien natural world: There are large monstrous creatures who occupy this lush forest world, they seem to be a cross between dinosaurs and arthropods. All the creatures have antennas on their heads. We watch just like a nature show the creatures, going about their daily lives. Drinking from streams, hunting, Laying in shade etc.

We then focus in on a much smaller yet still large group of creatures, more humanoid or Anthropoid in shape. They move a lot like apes, but again have something of the insect in them. They´re big and green, for humanoids, and they also have Antenna.

They seem to be hiding from the larger animals, in the rain forest, using it as their shelter.

We then see similar creatures only pale white, they haven´t got antenna´s like their green counter-parts, and, their environment is a lot less hospitable. Volcanoes rage, and we see little green or water or other animal life. These white humanoids seem much more war like in nature, scrapping over low resources.

We skip through a series of images, of the green and white humanoid creatures, in their primitive form, resembling the activities we´d expect to see of prehistoric man, only the white pale creatures, as you´ll notice seem to exist in a much more hostile environment.

Whites avoiding rivers of silver (or Mercury like substance) and Molten, looking for cool spots near the river and shade. We see some die or kill one another.

The Greens we see: running from large predators, collectively hunting, bathing their young under waterfalls and lakes. In one shot – of a group - you can clearly see them in a deep forest, strange animals jump from tree to tree around them, but then their antenna begin reacting to something, their eyes glow bright red, and the whole group runs.

Last shot in this series, The Pale White Aliens: It seems to be raining fire from the sky, a stampede of them try to make it toward safer ground, so as to survive the ash and fire rain. Some fall, finding it hard to breathe, some are trampled on – dying in the process, the others scatter, running for survival.

A small rock plunges into the earth and there is a loud explosion.


Then light again. The sky clears revealing the area of commotion; the weather has once again returned to normal. One brave Pale Creature walks back toward where the rock crashed, he has a stick; there is glowing molten lava in a hole in the ground. The creature looks over it in curiosity. He then dips the stick in the lava, the sticks end glows a bright color, a kind of purple fire.

He stares in amazement.

Later, he is in a much more habitable place of the planet, some other Pales (short hand) come and attack him. He sees a near by stream of the Molten, he runs towards it. The others chase him to its edge. The lone Pale grabs a stick; he dips it in the lava and it burns the same purple flame. Now a whole big group watches. He waves at the others who are attacking him, trying to scare them off. They continue to provoke him. Finally, he hits one of them with the flame. Immediately, the Pale who is hit by the flame, almost combusts - till the purple fire is consuming his whole body. He runs into someone and the same thing happens to them. The bullied Pale throws down the stick in amazement. The others move away from the ones on fire, staring at this mystical site. The two on fire melt, disintegrating into nothing.

Then the Pale Creatures gather and stare at this now glowing lava river in amazement.

Cut to,

Image Of Mars.

Tag: Millions of years later

We scale the wide lifeless expanse of Mars. Focus in on a mountain, with deep, sharp crevices. A sound emanates from deep inside one of the cavities of the Mountain; a kind of indistinguishable patterned sonar.

Cut to,

Slowly we drift toward earth, along the way the sonar sound gets tuned into various radio and television stations. We hear Bart from The Simpsons “eat my shorts”, Nirvana screaming something about teen spirit, a sports commentator on the Olympics, country music etc.

We see the skyline of Earth. The lights from the cities as we drift further down. Till we end up in New Mexico.

We are in a small town café in the day, New Mexico. A serious late twenties man is drinking coffee, reading the papers.

The waitress comes up to him, “So what you having? The usual, doc?!”, “Actually I´m OK. Not hungry to-day, just can´t stop thinking about work.”

“You need to keep up that appetite now, that big brain´a yours ain´t gonna feed itself. Sides, if you find them little green men today, you ain´t gonna wanna have your first encounter on empty stomach, Dr. Erdel.”

Dr Saul Erdel smiles, “You´ve convinced me, the usual.” Then his mobile starts buzzing. He reads a text. It says “You´ve got to come in right now. Its happening.”

“Hold the usual Burtha. I have to go to the office.”

He gets in a Jeep and we see him driving fast toward the desert. We see as he drives past a vast array of large radio telescopes. He takes his radio and switches it to a special frequency and we hear a bandwidth that is transmitting an odd signal.

We see as he enters the offices of SETI (Search for Extraterrestrial Life), the army stands outside the offices. As soon as he enters a Chinese colleague, rushes up to him. “The signal came up last night.”

Dr. Saul Erdel: “What?” “It came on last night.”

The oriental man bursts into a flurry of scientific jargon, so as to explain what is happening.

Dr. Saul asks him about “the army”, The Oriental man - who we now know is Dr. Lee - replies “National Security”. Erdel: “What is this for real?” To his shock, Dr Erdel a physicist and the leading expert in radio communications, is hearing that the station has received a radio transmission from another world.

He immediately wants to know everything. Apparently U.S. Government officials found out immediately, and shut down all radio station frequencies in which the signal could be heard.

Finally Dr. Amanda Waller, enters the room, brazen and with a look of singular purpose. She introduces herself and asks to speak to the head of department. Dr. Erdel volunteers himself. She immediately asks him to come with her. Saul asks to take Dr. Lee, she agrees.

They are driven off into the desert, escorted by secret service police and military. In the car, Dr. Waller explains that she is “Secretary Of Defense and head of the Secret Services of the United States of America.” She asks for Dr. Erdel and Dr. Lee´s credentials; suitably impressed for such a serious woman, Amanda explains: “So you shouldn´t have trouble understanding this has become a matter of National Security, Code 5, on a need to know basis. We don´t want to exclude you, but telling anyone about the discovery today, would be a serious breach of National Security, and therefore would constitute a federal crime.”

Dr. Erdel turns to Lee and asks “What the hell is going on?”

Dr. Lee, “ I don´t know, they stormed the office before I could run any calculations, all I know is the signal was strong and it didn´t come from any of our satellites, and I doubt that it is human in origin.”

Amanda: “Well let me explain; at approximately 15:00 hours this morning an alien signal was picked up. A U.S. defense team intercepted the signal at your station. We´re just taking the necessary precautions.”


“We´ve hacked your system from the beginning Dr. Erdel. Trust me it´s better than the other option, my superiors suggested.”

Dr. Erdel: “What´s that?”

Amanda: “Psych evals, of all staff working on scientific projects of a sensitive nature. Anything like this ever happened, and we had a scientist we took for an idealist; you know the type, kind´á guy who believed a discovery like this had to be shared with the American people, because they had a right to know, they´d snub him out before he had time to make his morning coffee. Just another tragic accident or suicide, of a mind to brilliant for his own good.”

Dr. Erdel: “Are you for real?” Amanda smiles “No, of course not.”

Dr. Erdel: “Where are we going?” Amanda replies, “Now how good a secret agency would we be if we told you that?”

Cut to:

They arrive at a Military landing strip. A private jet is parked right in front of the convoy. Amanda is taken out of the car. The loading bridge opens on the jet. Amanda gestures toward the two, to get on the plane.

Cut to:

The plane taking off.

Cut to:

Inside the plane Dr. Erdel now agitated starts to want answers.

Amanda for a while is elusive, but then begins to talk. She explains that they have received an alien transmission from space, which has been confirmed by a number of Government agencies around the world. She concludes with the shocking statement. “It´s emanating from Mars.” Dr. Erdel immediately protests, claiming “ That´s crazy. “It´s impossible that a signal could come from Mars. It’s a barren, lifeless, desert; we would have known if any intelligent life existed there.”

Amanda tells him that that were her sentiments exactly, and she has a great respect for his work in the field, and she personally wants him right by her side as one of her main advisors. “On what?” he asks.

Amanda “Well the greatest ticket of all. Mans first mission to Mars. Get ready to make history Dr. Erdel.”

Cut to:

Tag: 7 Months later.

Dr. Erdel is in a lecture room giving a group of cleancut Government looking types a technical scientific lecture, about the signal. Many stare in bemusement, others in awe.

Various scribblings and diagrams about bandwidths, megahertz and frequencies etc, cover the White Board.

He explains that what we know about the signal is it is stationary, and which part of Mars it is emanating from. He explains that for us to land in that region of Mars, our trip will have to be calculated to a very high degree of precision, because the alignment of the Planets has to be very precise, to compensate for Earth and Mar´s respective orbits. He explains “Effectively we are trying to shoot at a large and fast moving target, and on that moving target, we´re aiming to hit a rotating bullseye the size of a pin.”

Someone at the lecture: “So how do we do it?”

Dr. Erdel: “Well; aim with a machine gun.” Some laugh.

Dr. Erdel. “We need to send several shuttles to get a reasonable chance of landing in the vicinity of the signal.”

Cut to:

NEWS BROADCAST IN NEW ZELAND. Program: The Hard Line With Dan Brower.

Dan: “ Do they really expect us to believe that all of a sudden coinciding with a mission to mars, and the cutting off of various radio stations around the world, that nothings happening up there. This has been the quickest set up for a mission to Space, in the history of space aviation, why? … I think our Governments are hiding something that the people have a right to know. You heard it first here on Hard Line with Dan Brower.”

Amanda in her office. Various TV screens on the wall, show shadowy silhouetted figures speaking to her.

One of the figures says, we have everything under control on our side, people just take him to be a nut. He adds: “Besides the whole world is completely lost in excitement about the mission. 5 of our Astronauts have already become pinups. Once they take off, no-ones gonna watch this guy; we´ll have 24 hour news coverage on the mission, live feeds from the shuttle; trust me this guys gonna fade out like the rest of em.” But another protests, “we can´t afford for this guy to be operating. Until we can verify where that signal is coming from, and that it presents no danger to the American people, I want a complete lock down on media reports about the shut down of radio stations, and, information proliferation on mission objectives.” Amanda replies, “we are in talks with New Zealand now, sir.” She adds: “ But remember what we are trying to protect here. Its not only the safety of our citizens, but their freedom. That means their most precious freedom. Their freedom of speech.” Another silhouette answers “I admire your concern for the liberties of our people, but this is too sensitive, Dan Brower is dangerous, and he´s gaining more popularity on the internet everyday. He could compromise the mission. Think what could happen if Islamic Fundamentalists hear that America is trying to make contact with Martians. Think how that could compromise our relations with Saudies, or, destabilise the region. The rippling affects of letting this information go beyond us is unthinkable.”

Amanda nods, getting the point. She says “I´m downloading the satellite images to you now sir, its submerged in sand, and its seen better days, but the picture is clear; it seems to be some kind of transport device, sir. A spaceship.” You see her computer screen, on it images from Mars download.

Cut to,

Parades around the country. We hear a newsman talk about how historic a day it is; the G8 have unified, collaborating with each other, in a two year mission for man to explore Mars. All the resources and know how of the eight states has been pulled together, culminating in this historic moment. 12 brave men from various nations, will be sent to chart different areas of Mars. (Of course we know this not to be true, in fact it is only one area of Mars they are interested in) Mans first mission to Mars. People are crying, waving at the 12 men on a podium in space suits. We see a news report on one of the astronauts who doesn´t go and decides to stay with his family.

Cut to


We see in quick succession: Mission Control Stations in Tokyo, Paris, London, Moscow etc all bustling with activity. Untill finally we are in NASA Mission Control in America. We focus in on Dr. Erdel. As we look out the window with him, we see the most magnificent, giant, technologically advanced looking rocket ship. Seeming, far bigger and far more advanced than any of our current space shuttles; however the design is still familiar.

A tear drops down Erdels face, as he scans the crowds glaring in amazement.

We hear the familiar voice of George Diller announcing the count down from 10.

We skip to France and Tokyo, counting down in their respective languages, then back to Diller´s voice in Time Square, as thousands in the streets watch the count down on a big screen counting with Diller: THREE, TWO, ONE, we have lift off. As the shuttle takes off, there are screams of delight, and Time Square becomes a living carnival.

The last image is of several rockets flying through space.

Setup finished. The main body of the story now Begins:

End Of Part 1

Tag 2: years later 2016:

(All shot in photo real)

We see the second ship land on Mars.

Image Of Astronauts in the ship. “Mission Control, landing successful. I repeat, landing successful.”

Mission Control From Shuttle Speakers: “Copy That, Over”

Two Astronauts look out in astonishment at the landscape before them. Just in front of the shuttle, we see the Martian desert, not far a head is the French Flag, lodged into the Soil.

They speak to each other. “We made it. I can´t believe it, we made it.”

They finally leave the shuttle in Space Buggies. As they get out, drive through the desert, they see another shuttle with a French Flag on it, not too far, beside it are some Astronauts, setting up some kind of station, meanwhile others are collecting soil samples.

The American Astronauts stop by the French. They say something to each other.

We skip some time ahead. A full operations center has been built. The various Astronauts work together. In the center of the The Operations Site is a small radar transponder. Various robotic Machines, can be seen, being sent off on scouting missions toward the mountain.

We see from the POV of one little robotic scout (which we will call master Scout) as it travels toward the mountain. The master scout is using radar to track the signal coming from the Mountain. As the robot gets to the edge of the Mountain, from its back shoots out another slave scout. This Slave Scout is sprung upwards very high so it is airborne gliding.

We switch to the slave scouts point of view. It glides from the sky, Slowly descending into the rocky Martian mountains. It seems to be navigating itself, to where the signal is strongest.

Suddenly it glides down to a spot in the Mountain, where the Mountain seems to have been impacted by something. It lands on top of the crash site and the signal is now incredibly strong. The slave scout in turn starts giving off a signal.

We now see activity on the front of the slave scout. A lens protrudes out of the front of the slave scout, which keeps oscillating in and out to focus on the spot it has landed. It spins round as well, slowly scanning the area. The signal gets louder. Suddenly we catch a flash of something protruding out of the sand; an angular, grey, metallic object, is protruding out of the sand, as if connected to something buried deep beneath the crash site.

Cut to:

In German Shuttle, two astronauts are in a large spacelab aboard the German shuttle, one is listening on a head set to radio signals, the other is eating: The Astronauts discuss in German, they are talking about trivial things, while monitoring the scouts.”2 weeks and nothing.” Says one. Suddenly one of the astronauts jumps up. “I think I heard something.” The other one says. “Don´t worry, probably another false alarm.” “No, no, tune into slave scout 7. I´m hearing patterns. There´s definite patterns in this.”

The second Astronaut switches to slave scout 7. He hears the same thing. Immediately jumping up hitting his head.

The first astronaut, notices a transmission message from slave scout. Slave Scout “Images Now Loading”. First Astronaut. “The scout is sending us images. Alert the others, see if we can get a confirmation from the others .”

Cut to:

They make an announcement, that is received by the other teams. You see as astronauts, pick up on the announcement, stopping whatever activity they were previously engaged in.

Cut to:

Back to the German astronauts in the spacelab. First Astronaut “OK switch to visual.”

They have a look on a screen, they see the images that were being sent by the Slave Scout. Suddenly one of them sees something onscreen. “Did you see that? What was it?” They stop on the image, they zoom in. Finally they see the image of the metallic object protruding from the ground. First German Astronaut looks at the other and says with a look of astonishment “We´ve got to get up there.”

We fade out, with the image of the metal object protruding from the crash site.

Cut to,

Many Astronauts get out of their buggies which they have driven to near where the Mountain begins. We now get a montage, of how they scale the Mountain, using various high tech technologies to do so.

Finally a few land at the spot with the Slave Scout and see the mysterious metallic object. They then begin to start digging, so as to uncover what lays beneath the sand. To every ones surprise it seems to be connected to the wing of some space ship. There is confusion.

Another Montage shows how they dig the site using technology, and it slowly reveals an alien space ship buried beneath the sand.

We now have at least a quarter of the ship uncovered. It is highly advanced technology, and dwarfs the human shuttles in comparison.

One of the astronauts discovers an entrance. He enters the mysterious ship, using a flash light to navigate himself through. Inside is pristine, undamaged, and clearly very alien. Everything in the ship is strangely at odds with everything we´ve come to think of as what an alien space ship would be like. He looks around the machinery with wonder.

The others speak to him through their intercom system, asking if he´s got a visual. He answers back that he´s speechless. He enters one room and sees a 3d star map, he presses on one of the galaxies, and an alien program comes on, speaking in a strange alien language, it seems to be explaining the lay out of another star system.

Finally he enters another room, it is white and he is able to glide in it. He sees a unit gliding in the center of the room. He propels himself up. In the unit there is an icy substance, but you can make out through the substance a nonhuman figure. The astronaut can´t believe his eyes. He calls to speak to the team. “You guys have to get in here.” One answers “What the hells in there?” He replies “You´re not going believe this, they were right. I think, we´ve just made first contact.”

“What do you mean?”

“Well I´m pretty sure I´ve just found the pilot.”

The last shot of the scene is a picture of our astronaut, his face reflected off the Cryogenic Unit, his eyes wide with profound contemplation.

Cut to,

Tag: 1 year later

Inside a secret subterranean lab. We are in two rooms partitioned by a one sided mirror. The Cryogenic Unit, is in a brightly lit room, various machines are connected to it, which are obviously, checking through multimodal monitors that the creature in side the unit is still alive.

We see that that on the other side of the mirror are various scientists in a lab checking the vital statistics on computer systems, of the alien being.

Dr. Erdel and Amanda Waller enter the room. They start asking the scientists questions. The scientists, comment some strange activity has been happening over the last couple of days, they are detecting high levels of electro magnetic energy emanating from the room. They can´t explain it. He also seems to be rapped in a field of kinetic energy.

Dr. Erdel asks if they think they are ready to release him from stasis. Amanda objects, saying they don´t know enough about the creature yet; he might not survive the release, could end up in shock or he could be dangerous.

Dr. Erdel retorts, we´re not going to find out much more if he is kept in a state of suspended animation.

Another scientist, a slightly older gentlemen, approaches Erdel and Waller very excited, he claims that of all the technology found, the stasis unit isn´t actually that complicated to figure out. It´s still advanced nanorobotics, but it´s almost like it comes with the manual. Dr Erdel says he has infected the alien system with a nanotechnology virus, and, now his nonobots are literally translating every aspect of the technology into mathematic formulas. He claims who ever built the stasis unit wanted the occupant to be easily released. There is a button on it that will activate a release program which sets another medical physiological therapy program into motion automatically.

Amanda Waller, introduces Professor Ivo to Dr. Erdel as the leading thinker in nanotechnology (We find out more about him later).

Amanda has to leave. She says she is entertaining The President as well as many other dignitaries that evening. She invites Erdel; he says unfortunately he can´t come; he´s been studying 3d models of the aliens physiology, so as to determine his resistance to viruses and infections, Dr . Waller smiles, “You´ve got to get out of the office more; you know only 10% of this job is science. The most important part is politics. OK well send me a report on the Martians physiology, I was particularly interested in your report on the X Rays taken of his cranium.”

Amanda leaves. Dr. Ivo jumps in, asking Dr. Erdel about his findings, as Dr. Erdel leaves the room. “Fascinating. You´ve been studying the creatures brain structure. So what are your findings?”

“That´s actually classified.” Dr. Erdel says. “That´s clearance level 6 information.”

Dr. Erdel is about to enter the room with the Cryogenic Stasis Unit. He´s about to take out a card to open the door. When Dr. Ivo jumps in, using his card to open the door instead. A computer voice: “Cadmus, Clearance Level Six: Welcome Dr. Ivo.” Dr. Ivo smiles at Dr. Erdel, who immediately understands the implications of what he´s just heard.

Dr Erdel “OK, fine. Apart from the size of the cranium area, most of it is normal, as you notice the base of the head is actually much smaller. His face almost human looking.” By now they are standing over the stasis unit. You can now see a clear picture of the alien, through translucent liquid. He is green and his body is slender, with sharp angular features, his cranium is tapered, small antennas pop out of the top of the front part of his head, his face is fairly human looking, and kind.

Dr. Erdel continues: “The size of the tapered part of the cranium is approximately double that of the average human. From Forehead to his narrow occiput is 40 centermetres. The circumference of his skull therefore comes up to 98 centermetres. In the Xrays imaging, in a lot of ways his brain is similar to ours; from what I can see there´s brain stem, a slightly larger limbic system than ours, but still the individual parts concerning memory processing and management are no bigger than ours. Although he does have a large Amygdala. I think early on in their evolution there was a lot to fear. Probably highly emotional. Cerebellum, again, similar size. Now this is where it gets interesting, there cerebrum seems to have 4 hemispheres. Two at the front of the cranium and two at the back. Its hard to say what they do, with out performing Electroencephalography and Magnetoencephalography scans on them. But there cerebrum may have up to 30 trillion nerve cells alone. They´re quite remarkable.” (Something better)

Dr. Ivo, looks at the antenna connected to the forehead, he points “what about those? Are they connected to the brain?”

Dr. Erdel goes in for a closer look. Suddenly, the creatures eyes open, they glow red. The room begins to shake and the equipment goes flying into the ceiling. The one way mirror cracks. Dr. Erdel, seems to start having a seizure. Dr. Ivo in a state of shock sets off the alarms. We see a picture of the creature, whose eyes look frightened.

We then see into Dr. Erdels mind, as he screams on the floor.

Scattered images present themself to him: We see an images of a planet being destroyed by large spaceships.

Many who look like members of the aliens species, are packed into small rooms, with hardly space to breathe. They look scared.

We see corpses of his kind, stacked in large mass graves on another planet.

We see a picture of what appears to be a child alien.

Then everything stops. There is calm. The stuff in the room continues floating. Security bust in the door armed to the teeth.

They see the commotion and aim at the stasis unit. Dr Erdel: “ STOPPP!! Stop. It´s OK.” Dr. Ivo helps Erdel up. Erdel “I don´t know, but I think he´s scared.”

End Of Part 2

Cut to:

We now see Amanda in a party, celebrating the successful space mission. Many dignitaries, elite and top military are there. She´s talking to The President who is walking with her, drinking champagne. They talk about Chinese contracts, for the technology gained on the mission.

Amanda´s phone rings. She looks at it and politely excuses herself telling the President that she has to get the call. She walks into the hallway and picks up the phone.

You only hear her side of the conversation.

Amanda “This better be important I was talking to The President… What?! (Shocked) … when did this happen? … and what is his status now… OK, OK. I want a full medical check up and report on my table tomorrow afternoon… I don´t care what Dr. Erdel says, you tell him its an order … do it now… and I mean everything. Get that? Every thing from blood tests to psych eval.”

She gets off the phone stressed.

She enters an executive office room and locks it behind her; it´s her private quarters, she seems like the whole weight of the world is resting on her shoulders. There is a large open terrace, parrellel to the desk.

There are pictures of her family hung up on the wall. She looks at on with her and her children and smiles, they seem happy and care free, and for the first time you see a soft side to this woman of steel.

She goes over to get a stiff drink from the mini bar, with her back to the terrace balcony. A shadowy figure appears behind her. He steps out from the shadows, he´s wearing some kind of masked costume. He appears as a silhouette in the darkness of the night. She doesn´t even flinch as you realize that she knows someone behind her.

Amanda: “Hello, wasn´t expecting you here tonight. How did you get past security?”

She continues to calmly pour her drink. On the bar table there is a gun, the masked figure obviously can´t see it.

Amanda “You know what; doesn´t really matter. So… why you here?”

Shadowed figure “I tuned into your radio signal months ago. I know its not from this planet.” In a raspy voice.

Amanda “Quite the imagination you´ve got there.”

SF “Oh really? … Cause whatever you´ve got down there in the desert is emitting high levels of electromagnetic radiation. Your not covering your tracks well.”

Amanda: “What can I say? The labs canteen microwave is on the fritz.”

You see the mouth of the masked figure. He smiles.

Amanda: “You know, Cadmus could use good men like you.”

She takes a sip of the drink, puts it down and edges for the gun.

SF: “Cadmus could use good men full stop.”

Amanda: “I´m serious. Aren´t you fedup of this mysterious vigilante shtick. Jumping around Gotham roof tops, after psychopaths, dressed as a flying rodent.”

SF: “I don´t know this shtick gets me more action than I´ve ever had. Pulling all kinds a bad girls these days. They all have attitude problems, but on the flip side, their the kinky types, into whips, leather cat suits, skimpy green leotards.”

Amanda smiles retorting: “It’s the car right?! Chicks dig the car?”

SF: “Actually these days, they prefer the jet.” Smirking. As he says this we see her edging ever closer toward the gun.

SF Con´t: “…I´m watching you… when all this mess blows up in your face, I´ll be there to cleanup, and protect the people from you.”

Amanda spins round with the gun in hand, aiming for the figure. But he´s disappeared.

After a minute of looking around methodically (you can see her training by the way she searches the room) She goes back to the bar contemplates. Pours another stiff one, and drinks it down.

Amanda: “Still can´t figure out how he does that.”

She composes herself, then leaves the room. As she enters the hall to the Great Room, where the main body of the party is, a female excitable younger British colleague comes up to her. She says that she´s found the man, they´ve been looking for. “Oh he´s fascinating. You simply must meet him.”

She then finds the man, a well groomed bachelor in his twenties: The British lady introduces them: “Amanda Waller, meet, Bruce Wayne CEO of Wayne Enterprises.” Now the soft spoken Wayne shakes Wallers hand. Bruce: “Pleasure to meet you. You really are the hero of the day, overseeing this mission to Mars.” Amanda replies, “To be honest the real heroes are the brilliant scientists behind our team. They´ve been superb. I really wish you could have meet Professor Saul Erdel, but he´s not feeling well today… By the way this mission owes no small debt to Wayne Enterprises. We couldn´t have done this without your funding.”

Wayne: “Well, for all humanity has suffered for us stuffy, socially detached one per-centers, I feel my family owe them at least this much.”

Picture Fades cut to:

Later on that night. We are in the home of Dr. Saul Erdel. He is in the hallway with his wife, who complains that he´s late and how little she´s seen him. He explains that things got hairy at the office and he had to have a full medical check up. Worried she asks if he´s ok. He says that he´s fine. She asks him to say goodnight to Neils, their son. (They called him Neils Galileo Erdel: relevant later)

He goes and sees his son. Half asleep his son calls out for his dad as soon as he enters the room. He is about six years old. The son is unhappy because Dr. Erdel missed his play. They talk a while, and the son is upset, but then Dr. Erdel, begins tickling him to make him laugh. His son finally gives in, and Erdel promises he´ll try never ever to miss anything important to his Son again. He kisses him goodnight, “goodnight champ.” Then leaves the room.

Cut to

Erdel´s wife and he are sleeping in bed. Suddenly we see Erdel is distressed.

Erdels Dream –

Erdel is transported into an alien world. We see this as if he is observing the life of the alien in stasis.

We are in the home of the alien. He is in a room of a medieval looking house. There are two other aliens with him, one who is a child, the other seems to be his wife. The small alien runs up to him, and jumps in our aliens arms. He embraces her warmly. The three then take a walk to the balcony, and we see from there point of view the landscape of an idyllic ancient kingdom. They look to the sky and two bright suns light the heavens, so clearly that you can even make out other planets in the distance.

The wife warmly embraces her husband looking at the pleasant scene.

Then out of nowhere, the sky suddenly turns black. The color of death. The two suns are now hidden, and the alien family become alarmed.

Suddenly a large grey metallic space ship pierces the sky. And in an instant, you see in the distance a purple spherical flame engulf another part of the alien world, then disappear in a flash.

Back to Erdel in Bed with his wife: His wife is woken as Erdel begins to wildly tremble. She tries to comfort him.

Back to Erdel´s dream:

We skip to a whole long queue of beaten and dishevelled green aliens being herded, by demonic pale translucent aliens, into what appears to be death camps.


You see the Aliens wife and an alien child in a death chamber. She puts her hand on a small window in the metal door separating her from whatever is on the other side. Then inside the room flames rise… She is literally being burnt alive.

The last image is of the alien in Cadmus labs in the Cryogenic chamber. An image of his eyes filled with raw pain. Cut to full view of the room: All the equipment flies into the air smashing in the walls, in all different directions.

Dream ends

Erdel wakes up in a cold sweat, screaming “Noooo!!!”

Erdel´s wife “Saul baby, whats going on?”

Erdel “Oh, nothing baby, just get back to bed now. It´s OK. Sorry, just had a bit of a nightmare that’s all.”

Erdel´s wife. “Can I get you something? Some water?”

Erdel´s “Sure baby, sure some water would be good.”

She gets up to get him water, leaving the room.

Erdel immediately makes a phone call. “Amanda… Yeah, it´s me. I´m OK… There´s been another disturbance in the lab?!…smashed?! … all of it?... Look, I think I know whats going on … we need him out of stasis now and we need a psychiatrist… Yes that’s what I said, a specialist in post-traumatic stress disorder… I´ll brief you in the office first thing in the morning.”

Cut to conference room. Dr. Erdel is in front of a lectern, behind him is a white board, with an image of the aliens cranial structure projected on it. The room is split one side with an international panel of scientists and on the other American military personnel. Amanda sits on the side with the military, next to a stern looking gentlemen, in Generals attire. He looks skeptical and ready for a fight.

Erdel: “ I´ve brought you all here today, to explain why releasing our alien visitor from stasis has now become an urgent matter of National Security.”

A scientist: “You want to release the Martian! why?”

Erdel: “First of all I don´t believe our visitor is a Martian.”

Gen Wade Eiling, the angry General sitting next to Amanda, interrupts: “What the hell are you talking about? We found him on Mars didn´t we? What evidence do you have to support, he´s from somewhere else?”

Erdel: “I´ve been having dreams, well actually nightmares.”

Eiling: “Did you say dreams? Dreams? What kind of hack scientist are you?”

Erdel: “General Eiling, if you´ll let me explain. I believe our visitor has some kind of extrasensory gifts.”

Eiling slumps back in indignant disbelief.

Erdel points to the Cerebrum portion of the aliens brain: “As you can see in nearly all parts of his brain, there is similarity to the human brain. However, there is one important difference. Where as the human brain is split into two hemispheres, their brain seems to have four. Two on either side of, another two inner central hemispheres. On the Cerebrum section of the two outer hemispheres, everything is normal, seeming to regulate the same higher functions of the brain as human brains; perception, reasoning, memory, complex emotion. However these two inner hemispheres of the cerebrum, which arose in a more primitive stage of their evolution, seem to regulate some kind of extrasensory abilities. The levels of electromagnetic activity around this area is fascinating.”

Eiling: “What has this got to do with your dreams?”

Erdel “Our thoughts, express themselves as electromagnetic fields. If somehow his mind can manipulate those fields, or interpret them, he could literally see into our minds, our feelings, our moods. Its probably become so second nature to his species they don´t even think about it.”

Eiling “If this thing is psychic, as far as I´m concerned it makes him even more of a threat.”

Erdel: “I think he´s made an unconscious psychic link with me. We are sharing dreams. And, if any of what I see has some basis in fact, I´m deeply concerned. ”

Eiling: “OK, so what have you seen.”

Erdel: “His world, wiped out, it was an extermination General. A highly advanced alien civilization, came to his world, murdering, enslaving, torturing, his people, without conscience, without remorse, without pity. They slaughtered men, women, children, killed his whole family. And by the looks of it, he escaped, by steeling one of their ships. Coming here. That means General, who ever did this to his world, they can get here too. We have to wake him and find out everything he knows about these aliens.”

Eiling: “And how do you know, what your seeing isn´t, in fact him reminiscing about the good old days, during his tour in “Venus” when he committed genocide over a whole civilization?” (Said sarcastically)

Erdel: “Because I´m psychcically connected to him. I can bet my professional career on the fact he isn´t responsible for it.”

Amanda: “And are you willing to bet the world on that too?”

Erdel: “If what I´ve seen of his mind is true, which I believe it is, I think we´d be betting against the world if we don´t wake him.”

Eilings eyes roll over with cynicism.

Erdel: “Look whatever it is in there is in a great deal of pain. He has witnessed the death of everything he loves. He has somehow reached out to me, and I´m feeling what he´s feeling. The symptoms I have are the same as the soldier returning from the Vietnam war.”

Eiling: “I don´t think it´s the little green man, I think its you whose cracked up doc. I think the pressure of the jobs getting to you.”

A young attractive blonde in a lab jacket gets up, making her way to the front. She says: “I think I can help my esteemed colleague explain this matter.”

Eiling: “Oh God, Professor Harleen Quinzel, yet another quack with an agenda.”

Erdel: “Yes this is Professor Harleen Quinzel, Professor of neurology and mental disorders.”

Harleen: “I´m also the leading expert in neurology, studying neurological factors that contribute to psychopathologies and specifically Post Traumatic Stress Disorder. Professor Erdel has briefed me extensively on the matter, and it is clear, however much it may be difficult to comprehend, that our visitor clearly has abilities, that have allowed him to fuse his subconscious mind with Professor Erdel´s.

Harleen Cont´: “The symptoms I have observed in Saul´s behavior, and those that his wife has reported to me, are hallmark signs of coping with a trauma. Hyper vigilance, jumpiness, difficulty sleeping, loss of libido, flashbacks, nightmares; this kind of behavior does not surface over night, and there is nothing in Saul´s biography to explain this sudden shift of mood …. Added to that, the fact that Professor Erdel has reported to me sudden sensations of irrational paranoia, that this slumbering aliens tormentors, are somewhere close, they feel almost omnipresent. It is clear that whether these monsters are Saul´s demons, or in fact the aliens, the true sufferer of this trauma, is the victim. Those are symptoms suffered by the abused, not the abuser.”

Eiling: ” Let me ask you something Professor Quinnel, isn´t it true that you think every ones the victim? Every ones abused? Isn´t that why you testify under oath, that those crazed maniacs in Gotham, responsible for some of the most sadistic crimes of the century, are really the victims of abusive childhoods. You even testified that that psychopath, animal who killed 19 people, snuffed out six cops, actually suffered from multiple personality disorder, due to early childhood sexual abuse at the hands of his father. So really he was the victim, and not truly responsible for his actions. The clown was literally laughing all the way out of court.”

Harleen cooly replies.

“I don´t see how my work in Arkum has anything to do with this current affair.”

Eiling: “You´re not objective, and the science you pursue is a pseudoscience. Which is why you had that animal put away in your little asylum, rather than the electric chair, where he belongs.”

Amanda: “OK that´s enough General. We´ve heard your proposal and we´ll take it under advisement. Lets all get out, get some fresh air and lunch.”

Picture fades

Cut to,


Erdel walks into Amanda´s office. He´s very agitated. She gets off the phone just as he enters.

Amanda: “Saul, sit down.” He sits.

Amanda Con´t.: “The committee didn´t agree, they thought it was to dangerous, with all the powers he´s displayed.”

Erdel immediately gets fired up, ready to defend his position with all the power at his disposal.

Erdel. “God dammit. God dammit. It was General Eiling wasn´t it? He just can´t see it can he, the ignorant son of a ….”

Amanda: “Watch your tongue Professor. That man´s served this nation proudly, and he´s made more sacrifices for this country than you´ll ever imagine… Anyway, as I was saying, the committee, didn´t agree to your proposal… So, I went to the President.”

She pauses

“He has vito powers over the defense committee. I explained your position, and your impeccable record on this mission, and he´s agrees wholeheartedly with your concerns. He says you can release the Martian, under maximum security and with the supervision of the secret services.”

Erdel: “You did that. I thought…”

Amanda: “I love my country, and if that thing knows anything at all that can harm it, then, we need to know… And, also, I respect your instincts professor… You´ll be running the team, along with Professor. Ivo. We´d prefer if you don´t bring that Coo Coo bird Harleen Quinnzel anywhere near this facility again…”

Erdel looks stunned.

Amanda: “Is that understood Professor?” He nods, in agreement. Amanda Con´t: “Well that will be all then.”

She immediately starts reading a folder on her desk, before Erdel´s even left. Erdel gets up and leaves her office. He closes the door, but then immediately pops his head through again.

Erdel “By the way mam…” She looks up serious.

Erdel con´t “He´s not a Martian.” She smirks looking back at her file.

Amanda: “Get out of here, you clown.”

End Of part 3

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#1 Posted by ekrolo (488 posts) - - Show Bio

Adding Harley to the mix was interesting and I really liked Amanda Waller being heavily invovled with Manhunter.

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#2 Posted by TheCannon (20267 posts) - - Show Bio

How is this fan fiction?

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#3 Posted by jphulk26 (2092 posts) - - Show Bio

@ekrolo: Thanks dude, I´m not sure I understand the canons point. But I hope to finish this tonight. I wanted to bring all these characters to our world. Really appreciate you reading it. Let me know if you have articles, I´ll give my opinion.

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#4 Posted by GR2Blackout (2931 posts) - - Show Bio

@TheCannon said:

How is this fan fiction?

Its a fiction. By a fan.

How is all your Wonder Woman or Captain America stories fan-fiction? Because there made by fans.

How are all the movies you came up with on DC Movies Fanon fan-fiction?

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#5 Posted by jphulk26 (2092 posts) - - Show Bio

@GR2Blackout: What Captain America stuff?

Did you read anything or were you determined to criticize so you didn´t bother?

Fan fiction, is usually fiction that is someway related to an existing story that someone is a fan of.

Fiction, is something spun out completely from an individuals imagination.

That´s why its called fanfiction and not just fiction.

Thanks for your idiotic comment. I wasted about 3 seconds of my life reading it.

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#6 Edited by GR2Blackout (2931 posts) - - Show Bio

@jphulk26 said:

@GR2Blackout: What Captain America stuff?

Did you read anything or were you determined to criticize so you didn´t bother?

Fan fiction, is usually fiction that is someway related to an existing story that someone is a fan of.

Fiction, is something spun out completely from an individuals imagination.

That´s why its called fanfiction and not just fiction.

Thanks for your idiotic comment. I wasted about 3 seconds of my life reading it.

I was talking to TheCannon, moron. ^THIS^ is an idiotic comment.

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#7 Posted by CapFanboy (5590 posts) - - Show Bio

@jphulk26: Dude. He was talking to Cannon. That's why he quoted Cannon instead of you. And even if he was talking to you, you didn't have to be that angry about it.

Arguments. Don't cause them.

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#8 Posted by Twentyfive (3057 posts) - - Show Bio

Nice Fic, my friend!

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#9 Posted by jphulk26 (2092 posts) - - Show Bio

@GR2Blackout: Man I´m sorry, I just realised, I can admit when I´m wrong. I completely misunderstood, I thought it was Canon again.

really I hope you accept my apology.

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#10 Posted by deadpoolrules (4818 posts) - - Show Bio

This one,I like it...


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#11 Posted by jphulk26 (2092 posts) - - Show Bio

T@deadpoolrules: Thanks everyone, hope to finish today.