Hi, building um my sequential art portfolio.
Please tell me what you guys think. To see more go to my comics blog: http://miguelmendoncacomics.blogspot.pt/
Hi, building um my sequential art portfolio.
Please tell me what you guys think. To see more go to my comics blog: http://miguelmendoncacomics.blogspot.pt/
YOU are AWSOME man please
can you tell me something about this http://www.tumblr.com/blog/clemj98
Firstly:
WOW
Your artwork has so much visceral appeal to it, I can't even begin to explain. So many amazing things going on here. Just fantastic work!
For some constructive criticism:
Overall, I feel as though there is a bit too much of Batman running without knowing what he's running from, without establishing that he's running FROM something rather than AFTER something. In my opinion you can condense/remove a few of the panels without losing any of the momentum you've built into the story. The shot of the boots hitting the ground (and the frog jumping away is genius) can be removed, same with the panel before it of him hopping over the log. It's hard to discern that he's hopping over the log from the perfectly downwards point of view. Still a cool panel, but by this point I feel as though we know he's running through the jungle from the previous panel (page 1, panel 3).
The Superman reveal at the end is great, but I think a little foreshadowing of Batman actually running away from something at the end of page 1 or beginning of Page 2 would really help clue us in that he's being chased. You could even pepper in some smoke on the horizon in the very first panel of page 1 to show us that there is something very wrong.
Breaking down the pages, it is sort of in chunks:
Running
Running
Looking
Reacting
Mixing it up, peppering a few of each would help make the flow feel less chunky. Running, Looking, Running, Reacting!
I think you'd find a much more cohesive and emotional flow if we had a close up of Batman's stressed face somewhere early, then some running, then a close up of him sensing the imminent danger and preparing himself. THEN have Superman rocket into the story with the explosion, and the huge splash reveal. The actual panel of the explosion, with chunks of ground and the huge fireball is amazing...but it takes place in the jungle! We need pieces of tree, branches, roots, leaves, and chunks of ground flying! The first two pages have the jungle rendered gorgeously, and then we get an explosion that seems more like road flying at Batman rather than the moody trees.
The Superman splash page is something to behold. Dare I say iconic, even. My only "gripes" would be that it's hard to discern if it's Hal Jordan or Nightwing in Supes' grasp. If it's Green Lantern, their suits are made of energy and unable to be "held" like Superman is holding.
Batman in the foreground looks like he isn't wearing a cape, even though I believe it is draped backwards since he's reacting. What about throwing in some wear/tear into the cape? Have it dangling off of him in tatters after surviving the blast and the forest shrapnel that was flung in his direction?
In all seriousness, though, I think we're all floored here. I think you can really fine-tune this into something that will turn even more heads than you've done already. And please don't take my feedback as negative, I'm just F'N amazed here! :D
Firstly: WOW Your artwork has so much visceral appeal to it, I can't even begin to explain. So many amazing things going on here. Just fantastic work! For some constructive criticism: Overall, I feel as though there is a bit too much of Batman running without knowing what he's running from, without establishing that he's running FROM something rather than AFTER something. In my opinion you can condense/remove a few of the panels without losing any of the momentum you've built into the story. The shot of the boots hitting the ground (and the frog jumping away is genius) can be removed, same with the panel before it of him hopping over the log. It's hard to discern that he's hopping over the log from the perfectly downwards point of view. Still a cool panel, but by this point I feel as though we know he's running through the jungle from the previous panel (page 1, panel 3). The Superman reveal at the end is great, but I think a little foreshadowing of Batman actually running away from something at the end of page 1 or beginning of Page 2 would really help clue us in that he's being chased. You could even pepper in some smoke on the horizon in the very first panel of page 1 to show us that there is something very wrong. Breaking down the pages, it is sort of in chunks: Running Running Looking Reacting Mixing it up, peppering a few of each would help make the flow feel less chunky. Running, Looking, Running, Reacting! I think you'd find a much more cohesive and emotional flow if we had a close up of Batman's stressed face somewhere early, then some running, then a close up of him sensing the imminent danger and preparing himself. THEN have Superman rocket into the story with the explosion, and the huge splash reveal. The actual panel of the explosion, with chunks of ground and the huge fireball is amazing...but it takes place in the jungle! We need pieces of tree, branches, roots, leaves, and chunks of ground flying! The first two pages have the jungle rendered gorgeously, and then we get an explosion that seems more like road flying at Batman rather than the moody trees. The Superman splash page is something to behold. Dare I say iconic, even. My only "gripes" would be that it's hard to discern if it's Hal Jordan or Nightwing in Supes' grasp. If it's Green Lantern, their suits are made of energy and unable to be "held" like Superman is holding. Batman in the foreground looks like he isn't wearing a cape, even though I believe it is draped backwards since he's reacting. What about throwing in some wear/tear into the cape? Have it dangling off of him in tatters after surviving the blast and the forest shrapnel that was flung in his direction? In all seriousness, though, I think we're all floored here. I think you can really fine-tune this into something that will turn even more heads than you've done already. And please don't take my feedback as negative, I'm just F'N amazed here! :D
Everything that has been said here, plus I would like to add that if you are trying the out-of-bounds style for the panels, don't repeat it too often. People will grow weary of it.
Your artwork is very interesting , I could sit and talk about it for hours. I draw and paint, I actually used to sell my pics for candy money in Chicago as a kid. Your art reminds me of some of the good stuff from the mid 80's to mid 90's, it's good man!
Love it, love it, love it, love it, LOVE IT....except for that bat-pupil I caught on page three.
KEEP THE EYES SOLID WHITE YO!
@Mercy_ said:
@The Man of Yesteryear said:
EDIT: I actually was planning on using this originally anyway >.> Mercy, you image-quote-stealer!
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